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sadly it all ends
Contributed by
PhantomVampyress
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Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 12:55:31 PM in AEST
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Anger, resentment and jealousy
consumes most of me
Sweetness is there
but turning sour
waiting and wanting
dreaming and hoping
something happens to me
worth while
the next day always gets here
and nothing new
nothing changed
everything the very same
I feel excitment every
now and then
it passes over
something begins
yet sadly it ends
broken hearts that never can mend
JENNI
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Re: sadly it all ends
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 01:07:26 PM AEST
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Good flow on this Jenni.
I also like the idea that things cycle, even within cycles.
Nicely written. |
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Re: sadly it all ends
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 03:43:44 PM AEST
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| This is a good poem. I think the broken heart theme comes in late then the poem suddenly ends. The message still gets across though. |
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Re: sadly it all ends
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 05:38:55 PM AEST
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Wow!!! I just love the way you wrote this Jen, the rhyming was perfection.
Good write hon
Jane~ |
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Re: sadly it all ends
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th September 2005 @ 11:13:51 AM AEST
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Great write. I thoroughly enjoyed. Thank you
Tim |
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Re: sadly it all ends
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 01:23:02 AM AEST
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Good job expressing yourself here Jenni. This piece kept a good flow with the rhymes, and your feelings are relatable.
Love that last stanza: )
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Re: sadly it all ends
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 09:29:17 PM AEST
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I can so much relate to ur poem. A very well written piece of poetry u have presented us with Jenni. I hope things brighten up for u.
*hugs*
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Re: sadly it all ends
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by emystar on
Monday, 11th December 2006 @ 09:49:00 PM AEST
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I hear ya on this one for sure jenni but joy cometh in the morning.
We all have these days, I'm sure.
Keep the faith, friend!
luv, huggs, prayer,
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Re: sadly it all ends
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by myheartsvoice on
Thursday, 25th January 2007 @ 11:33:46 AM AEST
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Quite beautiful yet sad poem this is, of course very nicely presented with your usual ammount of conviction. Perhaps someone will come along sooner or later. Mean while don't despair, wheather in love or not, married or not, life offers an abundant source of thing's for us to take hold of, we just have to know what to hold on to and what to let go of. Lovely writting along with such sincerity.
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