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My Suicide
Contributed by
slightly_broken
on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 11:22:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Promises will be broken,
it's just a matter of time.
Until those words thats are spoken,
so gentle and sweet.
Are turned into such evilness,
and oh so fake.
The funny part is,
I will just sit there and smile,
little do they know,
what my future shall bring.
the best part is,
they know nothing of what they'so I just sit here,ve done wrong,
so I just sit here,
I'm my dark little corner
knowing there is nothing anyone can say or do,
to stop the inevitible,
my own, my precious
my suicide.
Copyright ©
slightly_broken
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2005-09-06 23:22:47]
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Re: My Suicide
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by sick_n_twisted on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 12:41:57 AM AEST
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lol awesome poem for your first one
my friend wrote her first one too and it said sumthing about a dark corner too lol but awesome poem loved it...im sorry you felt like that my first poem is about suicide also but its not half as good as this one....lol awesome job !
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Re: My Suicide
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by remote on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 04:56:21 AM AEST
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| How are you doing today? |
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Re: My Suicide
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by emphaticplacebo on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 09:51:48 AM AEST
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Great job for a first write, and dont forget-- we all had to start somewhere, in terms of writing poetry that is, so no one is in a position to poke fun. You have a great talent to build upon, so dont stop writing.. check out other members poetry, see how they connect their sentences and see how the many varied rhyming schemes work (check mine out if you like, being similar subject matter and all) Best of luck, and I hope to read more from you..
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Re: My Suicide
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by WAE on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 03:50:59 PM AEST
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Nice writing...
Keep up good work! |
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Re: My Suicide
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by edwynne on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 01:16:29 PM AEST
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not a bad effort at all, well done : }
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