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The Light Fixates
Contributed by
pUnKa_RaCh
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Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 08:29:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Today I had a vision, one of
Lilies in the field, I couldn’t help
But look as hope before me
Was instilled
I gazed upon the light, cascading
Before my eyes, an obscure
Beaming of yellow, fascinated I
Didn’t realize
What it was I beheld, the untold
Radiant power, which fixated
My dull mind, the majestic
Simplicity of the flower
Green field of golden colour, pure
But potent mirage of sight,
Illumination as if so real,
Virginal captivation of an
Untouched light
The light quickly fades darkening
God’s creation, but I long for
This to last forever, my
Beauteous meditation
This vivid dream I had, looking
True beauty of which I saw, a
New-found hope, lasting for
A second and then
No more.
Copyright ©
pUnKa_RaCh
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2005-09-06 20:29:56]
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Re: The Light Fixates
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 08:37:53 PM AEST
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| Great write though i hope that your life is not fading as in your dream. |
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Re: The Light Fixates
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by brew on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 10:22:00 PM AEST
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what a beautiful dream........driving can take and make.! its peaceful at times.
Brew~ |
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Re: The Light Fixates
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 12:58:51 AM AEST
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wow, the emotional, psychic energy at work here.
As if you had some sort of mystical awareness imparting gradually for more than what your minds reality attention could hold, like a colorful waterfall of light.
It was just grand reading it, I like uncompounded reading like yours. Simply beautiful, yet so powerful.
The light rays really were bending beautiful for you, and spiritually pure, and divine reflection of the author's beautiful creation.
I pray you get another chance at this newly found desire again real soon.
Raquel Leah
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Re: The Light Fixates
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 07:43:57 AM AEST
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Rach this was absolutely brillant. The imagery u implant into the readers head is just magical. An outstanding piece of poetry written so remarkably well.
Hugs,
Sue, Dreamer |
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Re: The Light Fixates
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 08:48:52 AM AEST
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Add another gem 2 your already filled little box of poetic treasures this is beautiful and
just reached into my heart . . .
Ben |
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Re: The Light Fixates
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 8th September 2005 @ 09:17:23 PM AEST
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Rach...
(finding words...hold on a sec..lol)
Man-
If even for a thousand years I searched..
I could not possibly find a single thing
I did not like about this..
On the contrary my friend..
I'm not sure I can say enough good-
(though I will ramble a bit here..)
It's beautiful..
and so very poetic-
..written so well...so very well..
I love the well placed puncuation..
the way the words flow without any effort
and how the rhmye..though subtle, took me right along to the end..
where I was sadened by the fact that it had, infact...ended..
The last stanza was perfect..in every way-
(my fav)
Magnificent Rach..
truly a 5 star piece of work..and beyond-
Sincerely Yours-
Billy
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Re: The Light Fixates
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 8th September 2005 @ 11:40:59 PM AEST
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wow what a brillant and beautiful write.
you did well on this one. |
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Re: The Light Fixates
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by emystar on
Friday, 9th September 2005 @ 02:37:55 AM AEST
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Very beautifull, indeed.
Awesome write as always.
huggs, luv, smiles,
emy |
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Re: The Light Fixates
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 07:32:46 PM AEST
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enchantingly wonderful.... but dont be dreamin' when your drivin' friend! :p
hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: The Light Fixates
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by hardrocker15198916 on
Sunday, 25th September 2005 @ 02:00:09 PM AEST
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that had left me word less
i have no idea what inspired you to
write such a beautiful piece
but send a message telling me
i am infatuated with this poem
-->Rae |
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