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I Am
Contributed by
pisces101
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Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 07:07:17 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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If I am a whore
It is only of yours
If I am a beggar
I am a beggar of you
I am not deserving of the clothes on my back
Or even the prayers that I pray
But deserving of your love
I am
Every step I take, I take for you
Every breath I breathe, I breathe for you
Every sound I speak I speak it for you
And when my eyes wake , they wake for you
So If I am a whore
It is only of yours
And If I am a beggar,
take what you will
And hold it for keeps
The darkness will fade…
Because if I am a whore
It is only of yours
And when my eyes wake they will wake for you
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Re: I Am
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 08:51:48 PM AEST
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Hmmmm...interesting write.
But I like the context....the meaning is not obvious so I like that. You make the reader think, I appreciate that.
I enjoyed this poem because it was different!
Great effort! |
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Re: I Am
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 09:05:32 PM AEST
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| Good write though i think . . . I shall no say it. I hope your relationship is not an abusive one. |
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Re: I Am
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 05:59:43 PM AEST
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Apparently we're on the same wave length right now :O
Well, I'm sure I don't have to tell you I'm finding myself in a similar situation these days...Your anguish is fully felt, and it was expressed vividly. Nicely done!
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Re: I Am
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 07:11:04 PM AEST
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This sounds vaguely like a song from The Police.
However, it doesn't paint the narrator in a very favourabe light, IMO.
Keep writing,
N_F |
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