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Deceitful You

Contributed by hauntedscorp on Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 05:54:41 PM in AEST
Topic: sarcasticpoetry



Take a moment to reflect
read my words and dissect
Find the meaning that is mine
trapping feelings you can't define

Love consumed, virtual disgrace
evidence---vanished---without a trace

A slut of emotions
please forgive the notion
Connective tissue that enwraps
the blackened heart that entraps

Convince me of intentions that you allege
charm and deceit...an alluring pledge
The hassle is not worth the crime
the view is not worth the climb

Sit down. I'll beat you to the punch
It was all a game, ( I had a hunch...)




Copyright © hauntedscorp ... [ 2005-09-05 17:54:41]
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Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by Eternal_Dreamer on Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 06:01:45 PM AEST
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What a smashing piece of poetry from the talented Miss Scorp. You have a striking effect on the way u bring this across to ur reader. Love can be all the above mentioned, but it also has another side. I do hope and pray you find the love and happiness your heart truly deserves. You my friend deserve the best.
Hugs from ur fan,
Sue, Dreamer


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by lostinmyself on Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 06:07:28 PM AEST
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Oh Scorpy...

That really hits you hard, I know.

Gosh, I know how this feels, oh, and I know how much it hurts.

You write this out so well, you can feel pain in the words, and that isn't an easy thing to do.

Great write hun, it's a shame you had to be so upset to write it..

*hugs tons and tons*
Phil xxx
(Wowed by good poetry)


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 06:32:16 PM AEST
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Oh yeah! ! ! Another great Scorpenator write. I can feel the anger and definitely the sarcasim and you know how well I can relate.

TIMraider :)


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by LoveStruck_Hippie on Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 09:40:25 PM AEST
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Great write Scorp.

So many times I have felt this way, I never had the words to put it quite the way you did.

*hugs*

Shannon


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 10:43:58 PM AEST
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Wonderful and expressive 2 the higest degree scorp, a lovely write and so filled with
deep and passionate emotional conviction, you are one of a kind . . .

(((((scorp)))))

Ben


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 07:50:07 AM AEST
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Well now....Raw...that is how I would describe this, yes, raw...raw emotion and raw feelings (not the same)
I FEEL this piece!
Great emotive write!

(bounce...bounce.. ;) )


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by sprinter27 on Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 12:05:47 PM AEST
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ooo, scorp!! i like, i like! this was a great piece, scorp (as always), keep up the teriffic work!

~sprints


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 04:05:51 PM AEST
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nice expression of the condition of the heart,

An analysis of the blocked loved, dishonest from the get go.

Lies.. a love that lies to love. Love in, or of self.

Demarkating or separating love from love
destroying it before it destroys you.

Being humiliated by your own loves love

The blackened heart bears witness, no detection of red blood life in it

a very promiscuous heart studying its inner cells
luring itself to love love, and no proof of proving that is does or is..a magic spell is cast deceiving at it best

Some sort of insecurity contract set up here,

Sort of like a fight or flight, emotional field

*****Sit down. I'll beat you to the punch
It was all a game, ( I had a hunch...)

bailing out before its too late.. throwing or putting to the side...

Well, you drew me into this one lol..

Raquel Leah











Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 05:51:16 PM AEST
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great poem. lies and deceit that's life baby. thank you for the nice comment. I look forword to reading more of your work.


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by Willofree on Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 07:54:56 PM AEST
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Very candid and to t he point. A very thought provoking write, which demonstrates that the emotion love can be very fickle and unreliable at times. I especially liked the last stanza.

Powerful write, Scorp

Will


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by Pisces101 on Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 05:39:04 PM AEST
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"a slut of emotions" great job scorp. that put a smile on my face (even though i'm sure thats not what you were intending to do.) i can relate .nice job

sarah


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by Archie on Thursday, 8th September 2005 @ 01:29:01 PM AEST
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This is good. You have a way of getting to the point quickly. Your poem shows honesty and depth.


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by Lionel on Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 02:57:19 PM AEST
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I've just read 6 or 7 of your poems. You have good poetic ability. Could you write a few happy one's? I know you have things to be thankful for. Right?
God bless


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by DamentedSuicide on Sunday, 4th December 2005 @ 05:35:10 PM AEST
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This is a really good write i liked it alot love the style


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 26th March 2007 @ 10:06:32 PM AEST
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Don't mince words scorpy .. tell us how you really feel!

lol

Seriously girl, this was outstandingl!! I especially loved,
"A slut of emotions" what a way to describe them!!

You have captured the pain of being deceived by your
very own passion .. but is it a deception really? I mean,
we feel .. and we should never be shamed into thinking
that this is wrong, you know?

EXCEPTIONAL piece, hun. RAW, unbridled passion ~

~Breezy


Re: Deceitful You (User Rating: 1 )
by JamesStockdale on Tuesday, 8th February 2022 @ 07:44:43 PM AEST
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Wonderful poem indeed.
Love the ending.
It had a smooth urgent flow to it.




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