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Don't Cry For Me Tonight
Contributed by
Karlee14
on
Sunday, 4th September 2005 @ 08:08:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Don't cry for me tonight,
Don't pray for my soul,
My never ending fright,
My heart will never be whole.
You already know what I'm going to say,
You can't stop me from my escapade,
This blade is all I know,
So sit down and watch the show.
Blood runs down my chest,
No one knows,
With this mess,
And my heartbeat slows.
Don't worry things will be all right,
Don't fret you'll be ok,
Express your sheer delight,
Until the unliving day.
Surrounded by darkness,
I scream but no one hears me,
I guess they couldn't care less,
But my dear don't plea.
I give up,
I can't take this anymore,
This pain is messed up,
My body is too soar,
Don't cry for me tonight,
Don't fear for my life,
Things will get bright,
But only with this knife....
Copyright ©
Karlee14
... [
2005-09-04 20:08:20] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Don't Cry For Me Tonight
(User Rating: 1 ) by hardrocker15198916 on
Sunday, 4th September 2005 @ 09:41:30 PM AEST (User
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how very suicidal of you
its a nice poem
well..
maybe not nice because its suicidal
butits written well
good work
-->Rae |
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Re: Don't Cry For Me Tonight
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 4th September 2005 @ 10:53:04 PM AEST (User
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::goes away:: |
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Re: Don't Cry For Me Tonight
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 4th September 2005 @ 11:08:15 PM AEST (User
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Your use of detailed contact have great advantages to this write
Your thought processes are on track ...
very clear images
Very descriptive style writing, you had my attention
Listening to voices, I pray it is only a fictional write.
Raquel Leah |
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Re: Don't Cry For Me Tonight
(User Rating: 1 ) by PoetBaby814 on
Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 12:56:56 AM AEST (User
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I thought it was really good
really sad though,
i liked how you rhymed
although some of it made no sense. |
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Re: Don't Cry For Me Tonight
(User Rating: 1 ) by Karlee14 on
Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 01:06:52 AM AEST (User
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By the way I wanted my poem to have some mixed feelings so people would think about what I meant in my stanzas.
Sicerely,
Moi aka Karlee |
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Re: Don't Cry For Me Tonight
(User Rating: 1 ) by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 07:07:08 AM AEST (User
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This is just so sad. You write with so much emotion.
Keep writing and thanks for sharing this poem.
Jane~ |
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Re: Don't Cry For Me Tonight
(User Rating: 1 ) by Karlee14 on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 09:11:49 PM AEST (User
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I just got that first comment. LOL, I said if you don't like my poem then go away. LOL he/she said :goes away: that's hilarious |
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