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On the burg of doing it
Contributed by
Mikayla
on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 07:19:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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On the burg of doing it
Starring down at this sharp metal blade
Thinking of all the head games you played
And of how many times I have prayed
But it still couldn't get rid of all the times I've been betrayed
I'm on the edge of doing it, though I wish not
I was taking the easy way out, but I got caught
What about me, how do I confide?
I'am now thinking of the news, the reaction they'll have
When they find out, I've committed suicide.
Copyright ©
Mikayla
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2005-09-03 19:19:21]
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Re: On the burg of doing it
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by Karlee14 on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 07:35:06 PM AEST
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| Wow I must say this is one of the best poems i have ever read. I mean rhyme wise. I don't know what it was but it just clicked. Excellent job. And if this is about you, DEAR GOD WOMAN DON'T DO IT!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Re: On the burg of doing it
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by trini on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 08:36:56 PM AEST
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wow. very powerful. the words flowed very nicely. keep up the good work.
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Re: On the burg of doing it
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by MorningDove on
Sunday, 4th September 2005 @ 12:43:45 AM AEST
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I believe that word should be 'verge' not burg. Keep writing to get your emotions out so you don't have to make such a drastic mistake. No one is worth killing yourself for, trust me on that one.
Rita |
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Re: On the burg of doing it
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by BurriedByMyLies on
Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 04:47:20 PM AEST
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| Awesome poem, it has great rhymes, well written and expresses very heavy feelings. Way to let your emotions out. It's always better to write a poem than to commit suicide, althought it's not always clear at that moment in time. Anyways, if you ever want to talk, send me a message, it will be my pleasure, ok ? See you soon :) |
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