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Little Fighters
Contributed by
perfectly_flawed
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Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 07:11:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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The world is full of soldiers
who are fighting with no purpose,
mindless robots with dangerous weapons
senseless murders towards others
as well as themselves
vacant bodies fall to the ground
along with their egos
a mass of children
left with gun as parents
But their army will crumble with the weakest wind
because we're not fighting countries
but one another
everyday.
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perfectly_flawed
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2005-09-03 19:11:55] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Little Fighters
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 08:38:23 PM AEST (User
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This is a good poem as far as the topic, etc. Some of your thought process seemed a tad loose, but overall I enjoyed this...
and you really pulled it together (and drove home the point) in the last four lines. Nice!
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Re: Little Fighters
(User Rating: 1 ) by xXx_lil_pyro_xXx on
Thursday, 3rd November 2005 @ 05:11:33 PM AEST (User
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very nice write, kristy, and it's very true, all of us have our own small battles to fight, and they wear us thin every day. |
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