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Poetry?
Contributed by
Doriens_Picture
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Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 02:26:26 AM in AEST
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The stars are in alignment again
Two stars that I can see
In the clear sky after a storm
I see them and want to cry
Beautiful and magnificently bright
I can still see them even with day light
They revolve around each other
And I can’t help but think of us
They seem inseparable
But like everything stars die
And one will leave the other
But will the other forget
I know that I could never
Or ever love another
For all my love I give to you
With out you my love would
Slumber on like
The rivers with out their mother ocean
The high mountain tops with out the snow
The sky with out the stars or moon
The bees with out the flower
The flower with out the rain
The desert without the sand
All these things with out the other
Would it self be incomplete
If I ever lost you, that is how I would be
I would lose the best part of me
You are everything to me
With out you nothing means anything
You are my whole world
Some one lost in darkness with no light
A bird with broken wings
You came and made an angel of me
My heart you cared for
It became your nursling
You eyes are my soul’s nourishment
Your mouth is from where I breathe
Your heart beats in my chest
You are all I could ever need
No matter what pains may come
They will always go away
But what you have given me is with me every day
I will cherish it and you for always
That will never change
I could not live with out you in my life
And dream every night of making you my wife
I Love You
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Re: Poetry?
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 02:49:15 AM AEST
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| I really liked it, I can relate, its hard, losing someone, or even feeling like your losing them, sometimes we can't do anything, and other times, we can do everything. Love's an amazing thing, I think I've only felt it once in my life, but I kind of screwed that up, good luck with everything, and I can't wait to see more. Keep it up. |
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Re: Poetry?
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by gwenevere on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 02:57:56 AM AEST
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| I do understand your poem very well.It is beautiful, comparing your love to two stars.I am sure you will travel the heavens together forever, Ros |
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Re: Poetry?
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by blackmarker on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 03:01:52 AM AEST
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I honestly refuse to believe that anyone who is drunk could write something as eloquent and lovely as this, lol.
Beautiful. |
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Re: Poetry?
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by Kano on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 04:57:22 AM AEST
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| You are by far a better drunk than I am. I get a buzz and I can't look up at the stars without falling on my back least of all spell them. And for some reason that seems to be the time I want to make new stuff up on the guitar, Very good poem man I will be looking for more from you. |
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Re: Poetry?
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 06:24:18 AM AEST
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God, you cannot be drunk when you wrote this. That is just not fair.
This was positively brilliant, you’ve written something heartbreaking and totally fabulous
Jane~ |
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Re: Poetry?
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 06:29:08 AM AEST
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I can feel your head in the sky.. thinking.. heart going fast...thoughts just riviting in the air.. going past the night into day, back into the night. Dreaming with every natures move.. whatever the eyes can see enhances the mind.. moves to the heart.. all this feeling is evolved around one person, using the natures items on earth... to feel, to think, to try to grasp, to love, to cry etc. etc.
I can just see you stare into your soul to find these feelings for this write.
RLD |
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Re: Poetry?
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by Mesano on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 07:45:26 AM AEST
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| this is such a beautiful poem, im left speechless... there is so much emotion and you did an amazing job of capturing it in the words... i almost wanted to cry when i read this, you are an amazing writer |
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Re: Poetry?
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by brew on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 08:58:26 AM AEST
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I agree.drunK and write like this?! hmmmmmmmm Well the write was incrediable........flowed freely of a inner heart for one.!
Brew~ |
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Re: Poetry?
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by inoc on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 09:08:13 AM AEST
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What a true romantic even if drunk this poem is so full emotion and feeling.
Hopefully she will get to read this and say," I do?"
coni |
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by Destined_for_this on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 11:44:48 AM AEST
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| I really like how you describe the feeling if you would lose her. That was very creative. Good job. |
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Re: Poetry?
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by purplestary on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 03:06:27 PM AEST
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i don't believe you were drunk...lol..and i won't believe it..i don't care what anybody says....it's just...way too..unfair...lol....so ...there....
brilliant write..amazingly brilliant and beautiful actually....lol...i wish i had this kind of talent.....
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Re: Poetry?
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 07:26:33 PM AEST
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Its a pity you spent less time on the title than you did on the poem. I'm under the impression that you typed the content out two handed, the title out one-handed.
I'm mindful of those two attracted stars, though. Its something i've never seen before ~ in my mind.
Keep drinking. |
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Re: Poetry?
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by kamelion on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 08:22:59 PM AEST
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I enjoyed your words for another and I also know what its like to have those feelings.
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Re: Poetry?
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by Gothchyk on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 09:58:00 PM AEST
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| i don't know how many times i have read this poem, too many times to count, the words that describe this feeling in my heart and soul are eluding me, an amazingly heartfelt and deep write. Beautiful, takes my breath away. |
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Re: Poetry?
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 11:42:46 PM AEST
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Hey, are you sure there were really two stars in the sky? Instead of, say, only one? Smirnoff, smirnoff...
Just teasin' you. This is very eloquent and beautiful, and you did a fine job pouring out your words. I hope your pain is healed, and your dreams made good!
Slàn
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Re: Poetry?
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 11:46:53 PM AEST
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BEAUTIFUL.....is amazing poetry my friend....
"You eyes are my soul’s nourishment
Your mouth is from where I breathe"
...God that's gorgeous, very vivid.
oh and this...
"With out you nothing means anything
You are my whole world".......isn't that what love does to you.....all that is worthless and tedious becomes so meaningful because their there beside you.
Wow, this is awesome.....
I'm missing out...I will MAKE time to read your stuff my friend. I promise with all my heart. |
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