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Undreamer
Contributed by
Unbreakable
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Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 10:43:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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If I wanted to dream, I'd look to the sky
I wouldn't look to you
If I wanted to live, I'd tell you goodbye
but I know that I'll get through
Dreaming was never my way to live
only the means to an end
and I'd rather die than pretend to forgive
when my heart's still on the mend
You gave me every opportunity
each time, a new way to fail
you showed me who I could never be
but my existence will prevail
I don't need to be a dreamer
to know that life goes on
I'll never change my demeanor
I'll be the same "me" when you're gone
Eventually dreams become memories
what would have or could have been
in your inner-most soul that nobody sees
you're dreams are the "you" within
That part of me is empty
I can't look for my truth in dreams
in this world where no one knows me
and nothing is what it seems
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Unbreakable
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2005-08-31 22:43:30]
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Re: Undreamer
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by brew on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 10:47:52 PM AEST
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Hm never looked at it like that.very deep..but, i have to say detiny, or hope...can be a way and can happen. I think it takes the one who is dreaming, to make it that way.! *shrugs* my own opinion. Good write, tho.
Brew~ |
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Re: Undreamer
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by Kano on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 10:59:55 PM AEST
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| Like the poem, but if you never are a dreamer what kind of long term goals are you going to set for yourself. I like being a dreamer. |
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Re: Undreamer
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by bluebird on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 09:55:13 PM AEST
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this is a very well writen piece of poetry, and i agree with it on many levels, but also, if one did not dream then one would never fail, and if you were to never fail how would you evr learn???
keep the faith
~bec~ |
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Re: Undreamer
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by fielding88 on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 10:17:11 PM AEST
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Wow, you've turned me into a fan. Second piece I've read from you tonight and I wasn't disappointed. You've got a clear way of thinking that I struggle to do and strive to do one day, and you put it all to rhyme here and it was all well done. Very logical conclusions you've come to here, and it seems like you're speaking from a lot of experience. Great stuff.
If anything, I think "you're" used in your last stanza might be the improper use of the word. Just a little typo I noticed : ) |
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