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Rain
Contributed by
hunterj2k
on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 08:02:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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She closed the door on the angel’s wings,
and left him squirming
in the dark.
The lights turned off, the door slammed,
the engine started,
and the rain
kept
pouring
down.
Down, into the streets, trickling
to the gutters, swirling
with the tears and the powdered bits of dried up
heart left trailing to the outside world.
The room smells like perfume, and that, too, will fade.
And die.
Like the rest of the world, passing in a constant stream
of colors, sounds, and smells that rise and fall with the moon.
No one ages;
they simply stay the same as they were the moments and the years before.
They decay into the nothingness of the Earth.
Unnoticed, untouched, unhindered,
disappeared and degraded,
all this shall pass.
And when he dies, he dies alone.
The coffin only holds one, for sure,
but so does his heart.
It may as well be buried now.
With the rest of his tattered
hope.
In pieces.
Hollow.
Alone.
Copyright ©
hunterj2k
... [
2005-08-31 20:02:56]
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Re: Rain
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by poisonpen00ad on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 08:14:09 PM AEST
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This one is just awesome. I loved it. The images and feelings here are brilliant. Great work.
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Re: Rain
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by MajesticPoet on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 08:42:33 PM AEST
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Great Write. Very vivid. Keep them coming.
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Re: Rain
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 08:55:55 PM AEST
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| Sad, but very the imagery its really good, keep it up. |
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Re: Rain
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 09:22:31 PM AEST
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woah.......the ending especially was so powerful and well.....gave me shivers really....
written so well, it reads brilliantly and captivates the reader with your choice of words and brash honesty...
tragic indeed.....well done!
Absolute pleasure to read. |
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Re: Rain
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by Bruce on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 12:05:36 AM AEST
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| powerful write |
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