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In for a Nasty Surprise
Contributed by
lancaster
on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 06:38:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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And it struck with such force
A velocity
With a propensity to cause
Damage
And turn this courageous heart soft
Remarkably unexpected
Undetected
Stealthily infected
A body otherwise healthy
Otherwise tragedy
Averted
In an asserted plea
Taken heed
Facing the heat
The clumsy march dances
As the rhythm romances the beat
Left to chances
Lives become incomplete
Coupled with the outlandish
The day becomes obsolete
And it rained with such intensity
The drops dove freely
Splattered
On a forehead
With pleasure so vengeful
Puddles never so red
Sunk in the waves
Are their homes
With their dead
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lancaster
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2005-08-30 18:38:08]
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Re: In for a Nasty Surprise
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 07:35:55 PM AEST
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I should've known you'd write about Katrina...How's your family btw? I was thinking about them the other day...It doesn't seem like their area was affected too much thankfully. I'm convinced I could throw any random subject at you, and you'd find a unique way to put a creative twist on it : )
You did a really good job with this one, and it's something on everyone's mind right now...
Scorp. |
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Re: In for a Nasty Surprise
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by LostAmbition on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 11:38:29 PM AEST
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| EXCELLENT!!! I'll be looking for your work in the future! So this is about the hurricane? Your words r awsome! |
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Re: In for a Nasty Surprise
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by Alibi on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 12:09:49 AM AEST
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| Yes, I do believe I have come across your poetry before, and if I'm not mistaken, I enjoyed it then as well. I do not know you as HauntedScorp does, but I think you were very creative with this poem, and the topic in general. You brought unique visuals to a perilous situation. Very, very good write. |
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