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i lost you
Contributed by
socialmisfit
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Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 03:20:41 AM in AEST
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i lost my way
so no loose ends
nothing to hold me down
looking around the corner,
but i cant see past the bend
can i say i really loved her?
god only knows
but a hole in my heart exists
i can see the darkness shineing through
but what am i going to do
i wish you could have stayed
i tasted love
but i scared you away
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Re: i lost you
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by valichka on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 04:01:41 AM AEST
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| i love this poem, really nice. |
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Re: i lost you
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 11:26:09 AM AEST
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Awww this is really sad. Hopefully you've only scared her temporarily : )
Nice job expressing yourself in this write.
Scorp. |
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Re: i lost you
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 06:30:42 PM AEST
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Hmn. The person you wrote this for might know who you're talking to, had you told them you were going to post this, but I'm confused;
"can i say i really loved her?"
. . .
"but i scared you away"
I find that this write speaks about two different people, when it concludes on the premise of one. Hopefully this (and the spelling inconsistencies) isn't a problem for them, too.
Good luck, SM. |
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