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Black Hole
Contributed by
sprinter27
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Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 05:23:03 PM in AEST
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If you look inside of me,
It’s a heart you won’t see
My heart’s been torn apart bit-by-bit
Taking on all sorts of blows and hits
Soon all that was left was a tiny piece
That you destroyed and killed with ease
Sp soon it’s just an empty space
And of my heart, there’s not a trace
Not that space is turning black
With all angriness at my back
And with all this pain and crap,
It’s turning into a swirling death trap
What was once a heart that was whole
Is now a screaming, spinning black hole
Copyright ©
sprinter27
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2005-08-26 17:23:03]
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Re: Black Hole
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by shelby on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 05:28:38 PM AEST
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emotional write calling out your pain. So very moving. Im sorry for your pain
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Re: Black Hole
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 05:42:06 PM AEST
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Go visit the wizard of oz...he'll hook you up; )
Joking aside, this is a very emotive piece of poetry here Sprints...Lots of pain in your words, and your loss is felt. Good job, and keep your chin up.
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Re: Black Hole
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by SilentPwn on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 05:57:49 PM AEST
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Mm. I could really feel your pain through this, awesome write. Nice way of expressing your emotions.
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Re: Black Hole
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 11:35:43 PM AEST
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Very expressive write, I feel you on this and can totally relate , dont let your heart get hard, and keep your head held high...
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Re: Black Hole
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by Bones on
Saturday, 10th September 2005 @ 07:41:46 PM AEST
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Really nice metaphor. I like it. The title kinda caught my eye too! This is a really good poem! Well...ya know. lol 6/5 ^^ hehe.
Peace,
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