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Ode of a Summer Song
Contributed by
hunterj2k
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Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 12:46:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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Over yonder comes the summer
Full of rhythm, awe, and wonder
Birds fly past to raze the treetops
Soaring higher, reaching star drops
Remnants of forgotten worlds
Of flowing colors, star shine whirls
Dreams caress a soulful flurry
Held by nature, judge and jury
Only past and future fades
While present never slips away
Lying gently, tufts of grass
Calm envelopes, troubles pass
As tulips spread across the field
The sunshine lowers, daylight yields
To nighttime dreams, of softer things
Of silver arches, golden wings
Of creatures of a world unknown
Imagination stirs and grows
And melodies which sooth one’s soul
Can strengthen love as truth unfolds
And old ways die while new are born
Revealing roses without thorns
The spirit soars and then decides
To dream again upon sunrise
Copyright ©
hunterj2k
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2005-08-26 12:46:47]
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Re: Ode of a Summer Song
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by Archie on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 12:56:44 PM AEST
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| For your first time you did an exceptional write. I enjoyed this immensely and welcome to YPDC |
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Re: Ode of a Summer Song
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 02:06:12 PM AEST
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This is lovely...Really good flow. Keep them coming...
Jenni |
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Re: Ode of a Summer Song
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by Winterland on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 02:33:54 PM AEST
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Wonderful job for a first write! I thought it very expressive and full of description and promise. Keep it up!
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Re: Ode of a Summer Song
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by shelby on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 02:46:23 PM AEST
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A masterpiece! I dont believe you though your first poem I think your teasing me!! If not we all better get out of the way* smiles*
Welcome to YPDC it will be nice to read more of your work!
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Re: Ode of a Summer Song
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 02:54:55 PM AEST
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| this was a great poem for your first write keep it up!!! |
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Re: Ode of a Summer Song
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by hoist1atca on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 06:48:21 PM AEST
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Very good write-
Flowing smoothly-
Keep on with the pen-
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Re: Ode of a Summer Song
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 10:49:54 PM AEST
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Wow! This is a brilliant , and captivating, I love the last two versus!!!!! 'welcome to ypdc!
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Re: Ode of a Summer Song
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by liquidsunshine on
Saturday, 27th August 2005 @ 12:51:22 AM AEST
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Sometimes the rhythm felt a little prolonged, does that make sense? But... I think that's just me tonight moreso than your poem. A very happy first write. Very imaginative, too.
Love and peace,
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