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Water
Contributed by
Sinned
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Thursday, 25th August 2005 @ 10:02:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
Haiku
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Water
White capped rapids swirl churning a current treacherous
Danger lurkes where young teenagers splashing wade dive and swim
A Young couple tranced embracing tasting first love unconcerned
Sinned
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Sinned
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2005-08-25 22:02:29]
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Re: Water
(User Rating: 1 )
by MorningDove on
Thursday, 25th August 2005 @ 10:30:05 PM AEST
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They are hard till you see one then they are simple. It would be like this:
White capped rapids swirl (5 syllables)
Danger lurking for young love (7 syllables)
Love is unaware (5 syllables)
It's always 5/7/5. Easy once you get the hang of it. I love Haiku.
Smiles,
Rita |
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Re: Water
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by lostrelic on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 12:54:04 AM AEST
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| ah keep trying remember what happened to the last person who was perfect we nailed him to a cross you will get it with practice |
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Re: Water
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by Archie on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 10:46:01 AM AEST
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| For not being a Haiku it is still a good poem. How can I not be merciful and give you a good rating for trying. |
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Re: Water
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by STECKS on
Wednesday, 14th December 2005 @ 11:21:56 AM AEST
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| The poem itself is very interesting. Good write. Keep Practicing on the Haiku format. |
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