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Torn in Two
Contributed by
Shattered_soul
on
Wednesday, 24th August 2005 @ 04:24:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Looking deep past my heart,
you can see Im torn apart,
torn in two different views,
one for me,
and one for you.
You see me
always happy
just as pleasent
as can be.
But I cant see me smiling
unless I look into a stream;
yet still with a smile on my face
I see that hidden tear.
Maybe I can only see it
because I know where it hides.
I know its in that special place
somewhere deep inside.
Screaming to get out;
Screaming to be cried.
Should I let it go?
Should I let it cry?
Im scared that if I do
there will be an oceans tide.
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Shattered_soul
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2005-08-24 16:24:51]
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Re: Torn in Two
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by O7NeVeS on
Wednesday, 24th August 2005 @ 05:30:29 PM AEST
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Great write! I really enjoyed the beginning...
"Looking deep past my heart,
you can see Im torn apart,
torn in two different views,
one for me,
and one for you."
Tanya
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Re: Torn in Two
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th August 2005 @ 05:50:10 PM AEST
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It is hard to tell sometimes when to cry, i suppose. Maybe there never is a good time. Maybe only when the need to do so out wheighs all the reasons not to. I like what i read here, thanks for the comment on mine. I am gonna have to read more of you to.
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Re: Torn in Two
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by Flyinglow on
Wednesday, 24th August 2005 @ 10:55:28 PM AEST
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| I really enjoyed the poem, the last line had alot of emotion behind it. However it was kind of awkward. To me atleast. |
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Re: Torn in Two
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by CrazyCowboy557 on
Thursday, 25th August 2005 @ 10:54:26 AM AEST
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| I like it, it's a very emotional poem, and to me is really relatable. |
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