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a Sonnet..
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 10:35:46 PM in AEST
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Hearts and Stars are dim and bright..
candle tips and orbs of light
swim in emptiness they say
many a billion mile away.
Many a billion mile and year,
before their beam discerns us here
are stars, their place as counterpart
are something hidden in our heart.
So in this tangled sphere below,
my heart cries out to yours...I know
that mine'll be dust in many a year
before your heart shall ever hear.
As distant is.. a star from star,
is heart from heart.. but twice as far.
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Man_On_High
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2005-08-20 22:35:46]
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by sprinter27 on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 10:43:22 PM AEST
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wow.... awesome write! i loved it! it was truely amazing. you've proven the saying: short, but sweey to be entirely correct. this was great and very truthful! and i loved the last two lines, they were terrific. awesome write, keep up the great work!
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by emystar on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 10:46:32 PM AEST
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Very creative write.
A masterpeice.
huggs, stars,
emy |
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 10:52:40 PM AEST
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My desire is to be a shining star one day, looking down on my children and granchildren and holding special places next to me as I know my special one has held for me. Something about togetherness that fills my heart with joy and love. Right now, I don't shine, but one day I shall again and I plan to shine and sparkle, just like I used too.
Love,
Rita |
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 10:59:06 PM AEST
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Oh my, I have tears of love for this poem.. this is truly a masterpiece..
I must place it in my library heart.. I will keep it safe upon my heartshelf.. I love this poem so much... its edible, breathable.. lovable, liveable.. what else.. its driven me mad with beauty striking my senses..
RLPoetess ; )) |
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by TheKid on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 11:19:32 PM AEST
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| wow simply amazing! |
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 01:09:49 AM AEST
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| Aye Man On High, a very good write, it was beautiful loved it. SLipSiX. Loved the stars affect. |
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by waos on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 01:32:33 AM AEST
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That was awesome!! As always I love the fresh beauty you describe
things with! Nice job!
~Kara |
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 07:35:03 AM AEST
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Awesome write, Billy....
I'm glad I popped in this morning...
Hope all is well...
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by Sahara on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 07:58:05 AM AEST
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Awesome write. Beautifully scripted with an extra twinge of sadness at the end.
Sonya |
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by brew on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 11:07:30 AM AEST
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The first stanza, is absolutly, breath taking. Many things, seem close to the eye, and then we do know they are far.! But, i always feel..the world is very small, and nothing is too far, if you want it bad enough.! So take those billion miles, away and make them only steps.!
Again, another beautiful write........sparkling like a gem
Brew~ |
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 11:37:01 AM AEST
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very nice Bill this cary me right along nice rhythum and love the last line well done . . .
Ben |
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 22nd August 2005 @ 01:33:03 AM AEST
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WONDERFUL!!!!!!!
You get better with every word..................all modesty aside, this is just an outstanding piece of poetry!!!!
Beautiful flow.....great rhyme and timeless ending......just remarkable...
dont forget me when your famous!...lol |
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Re: a Sonnet..
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 29th September 2005 @ 07:58:48 PM AEST
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What a profound little piece of poetry this is my dear Billy.
How sad and yet so very beautiful.
"As distant is.. a star from star,
is heart from heart.. but twice as far"
Loved that!! So full of melancholy, but done with such flare!
You have once again captivated me beyond reason. A stunning piece.
always,
~Breezy |
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