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Stay With Me
Contributed by
Writting_Fever
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Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 05:23:19 PM in AEST
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Baby I know what you're thinking,
About you and me,
How the time together,
Makes us more than happy,
But here's a new thought,
You haven't pondered yet,
What'll happen to us,
When you're college bound set,
This life with you,
Is cherrished in my soul,
But in just one year,
I'll spin out of control,
My head will turn round,
My body starts shaking,
For you to hold me,
My heart will go breaking,
A phone call a week,
Just might keep us strong,
But will it be enough,
To let us hold on?
Which one do we choose,
The right or the left?
Which one can we be,
The worst or the best?
The years will slow down,
And you'll find a new,
But in your heart, hopefully,
I'm the only one for you,
We still have some time,
But try not waste,
We'll think of a plan,
To dodge things, like this, we face.
Copyright ©
Writting_Fever
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Re: Stay With Me
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by colinbaker62 on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 05:49:09 PM AEST
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Hi writing fever. This is a very well expressed poem, and your feelings and concerns are understandably a mixture.
If I may say this. Very often our thoughts do not tie in with reality. So for example, you have probably already imagined your boyfriend meeting another girl, and rushing off with her into the sunset etc...etc....
Well, thoughts are just that,( only thoughts) and NOT FACTS. No one can prevent anyone else from THINKING they are President, but are they really? Just take each day as it presents itself is my advice, take advantage of all technology has to offer like e-mail, web cams, a Greyhound bus even ! (I think that's what you people in the US still call these buses yes?) and deal with the reality as best you can and not so much dwell on the thoughts in isolation from reality. I think you will probably both be stronger for the experience.
Good luck
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Re: Stay With Me
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 06:00:52 PM AEST
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This is a good, well expressed write. I myself wouldn't worry about what will happen in a year from now between you two. If only because for other reasons, you two may break up long before that, so why trouble yourself with things that may never come to be? I say deal with each day as it comes...Good luck! Keep up the writes: )
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Re: Stay With Me
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by twisted_dreams on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 06:42:54 PM AEST
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Hey.. this poem is really good.. i wish u and mitch the best of luck! i know who happy u are when u are with him.. and i hope everythin turns out alright! u have a incredible talent for writing.. and i hope you never let it go! keep up the good work!
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Re: Stay With Me
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by brew on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 07:01:35 PM AEST
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Nice write, but jumping the gun a tad. Just let all flow the way it be.and what is meant, you will see. ! Differ things, may happen, and the path which either choose, will be ones destin.! Good luck
Brew~ |
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Re: Stay With Me
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 11:11:03 PM AEST
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The write was ok..
but the reason behind is most profound.
You're at a cross-road in life that'll take you and him
seperate ways..
and unless there is undeniable and uncoditional love there..
you will be looking back on this in 15-20 yrs..
and hopefully with a gentle heart..
Happiness to you Dear, in the years to come-
Billy |
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Re: Stay With Me
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 11:42:46 AM AEST
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i feel your anticipation only time knows nice write very sincere . . .
Ben |
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Re: Stay With Me
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by Oceandreamer on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 07:03:19 PM AEST
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| Nice flow.If it's meant to be,it will be...not even distance could change that.Great poem. |
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