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Try Me
Contributed by
juliette
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Friday, 19th August 2005 @ 03:17:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Do not tread so softly across my heart,
Maybe I am craving something wild-
The presence of a twisted melody,
To singe the softness of this smile.
I am aging quickly,
feeling slighted,
With the passing of each new moon.
Imagining for once
not doing the right thing
Might get me up and out of this room.
Now I have never been completely righteous
I do not wear a fallen angels wings,
But my daring side,
so long buried under,
The continued failure
of yesterdays dreams-
So slowly reawakening,
a joyful vision that just might last
Bringing my stranger self back to me
as the hours tiptoe quietly past.
Each ounce of danger
drained from my existence-
Today leaves me hungry
for whatever is in store
So don't hadle me
with the gloves of a child....
I am so much stronger
than you give me credit for!
Copyright ©
juliette
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2005-08-19 15:17:29] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Try Me
(User Rating: 1 ) by vibes2go on
Friday, 19th August 2005 @ 09:44:00 PM AEST (User
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So don't hadle me
did you mean handle?
I loved the tiptoe .. just loved it!!! |
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Re: Try Me
(User Rating: 1 ) by Wachumiri on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 02:40:29 AM AEST (User
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A Child No More
I liked it, but I also felt the title needed to be... stronger. I hate titles! You finish a great poem, you're about to post it... and you need a title! Frustrating!
Well, I hope you get an awesome title for your awesome poem.
Take care.
David |
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Re: Try Me
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 12:14:50 PM AEST (User
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beautifuly exposed revealing and corageious
lovely work true 2 the heart and bold . . .
Ben |
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