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Contributed by
maestar
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Friday, 19th August 2005 @ 11:36:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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I close my eyes with no surprise
This is the end no faults to mend
And with no fear I know I'm here
In heaven where I should be.
But somehow this is not so fun as stories and books do tell
For I am grey and in dismay for others I know have fell
A loud shrill crack and suddenly I'm dropping dancing, swaying in the wind
With one loud smack i'm on the ground flowing in a river
I'm gone once more,
This is the end and now I'm forever shining.
For I am many different colours and for me men are mining
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2005-08-19 11:36:08]
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Re: Next
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by maestar on
Friday, 19th August 2005 @ 12:34:55 PM AEST
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I loved this poem maestar, you are the rain and then you turn to a diamond! How poetic is that!! Well done and welcome to the site! Keep writing, I look forward to reading your next masterpiece!
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Re: Next
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by Manda2 on
Friday, 19th August 2005 @ 12:43:24 PM AEST
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Well done Maestar! A very good poem.
xxx |
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Re: Next
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by lillyjane on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 10:57:19 AM AEST
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| Loved this poem , thanks for you comments on mine to..x |
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Re: Next
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by maestar on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 11:07:57 AM AEST
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HI READERS.
LET ME EXPLAIN.
MY MUM WROTE A COMMENT FOR ME ON (NEXT) AND BY ACCIDENT IT LOOKS LIKE I WROTE IT AS I HADN'T LOGGED OUT ON THIS COMPUTER! MUMS EH?!!!
I'M NOT THAT BIG HEADED! |
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Re: Next
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 01:31:00 PM AEST
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Unique write. I consider myself worthy of diamonds, but never even considered being one. This is really one to ponder.
Rita |
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Re: Next
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by Archie on
Friday, 26th August 2005 @ 11:19:06 PM AEST
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| Great poem. Youe transformation in the poem was quite compelling. |
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Re: Next
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by kcampbell on
Monday, 19th September 2005 @ 10:06:48 AM AEST
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| I really like the thought of turning into a diamond... Good write! : ) |
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Re: Next
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by Archie on
Thursday, 13th October 2005 @ 11:23:26 AM AEST
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| This is very good. I like your simple style in this. Thanks for telling us about your Mom. I knew you was not conceited. |
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Re: Next
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by Candice on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 08:47:37 AM AEST
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I'm very prowd of you for that poem.
Your allready a little Jem Me deers! |
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