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FEELING DOWN.
Contributed by
lillyjane
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Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 02:56:11 PM in AEST
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Locked up in a dungeon, I cannot find the key,
torment walks the path, of my memory,
unhappiness and tears, drag me through the days,
i'm locked away forever, in a black and morbid maze.
I feel so alone and helpless, no one can set me free,
i'm the only one who can turn the key,
a prison of my own making, spun from fear and pain,
out side stand the monsters that wait to kill my brain.
They lurk within the shadows, then in my mind they creep,
the only time they leave me, is when I fall asleep
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2005-08-17 14:56:11]
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Re: FEELING DOWN.
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by dagonet on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 03:28:52 PM AEST
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Absolutely brilliant write, sure its a huge pity that such horrific and painfull subjects cause such incredible creativity but at least its something positive to take from a feeling that is unbearable all the time. this is so brilliantly written i can really relate to it and to a small measure of how you were feeling at the time of the write even though the cause(s) remain a mystery, truly just a brilliant write to be honest.
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Re: FEELING DOWN.
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by vibes2go on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 03:56:39 PM AEST
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| down down down into a black pit .. then up up up .. and no one understand unless they have been there .. they claim too and they pat your back .. and smile a smug smile .. but they don't; not really. nice write. |
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Re: FEELING DOWN.
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by MorningDove on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 04:03:08 PM AEST
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This is a great poem on depression. If this is real in your life please seek help. I suffered for almost a year before seeking help and life was hell. Mine was caused by a health trauma and required medication because I let it go on so long. I know the effects and I also know there is help. Blessings. Hopefully this will help others who suffer in silence.
Smiles,
Rita |
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Re: FEELING DOWN.
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by Stellar on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 04:21:13 PM AEST
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Wow, excellent discription of how isolating depression can be. I use to invision it the same exact way, like a my own personal cell that I couldn't escape from, except when I would sleep.
It does get better though. You have to believe that. I'm living proof.
Take care and God bless,
Liz |
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Re: FEELING DOWN.
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by cutestmofo on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 05:36:40 PM AEST
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| readin the previous comments everyone say they can relate well i say this as not a poet but as a being i believe dat a smile from anyone is a specail moment i can keep to my heart thats y i don't get depressed anymore and as for your write beautiful just absolute beauty just like u i would hope |
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Re: FEELING DOWN.
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by all_that_i_can_be on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 07:25:18 PM AEST
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| amazing poem. great description...like people have said in comments before me, you cant really understand unless youve been there. i understand. it was a wonderful write. |
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Re: FEELING DOWN.
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 08:27:48 PM AEST
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Deep and powerful write. I hope you feel better soon..
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: FEELING DOWN.
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by justme03 on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 09:12:58 PM AEST
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| i absolutly love this. it describes so beautifully the feelings of depression. im still suffering from it as well and i have yet to come through that cell door. wish u sucess on unlocking yourself. i hope u are soon able to set yourself free as i wish the same for me. peace and much love, kortnie |
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Re: FEELING DOWN.
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by brokenandinlove16 on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 12:56:10 AM AEST
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*WOW*..............Its poems like these that help me see im not alone!! Not much more to say, i have to do alot of thinking now before i can get to sleep (its 12:45 at night.. couldnt sleep)
..... great right and hope you feel better soon..... **many hugs* from an unknown friend**....
-Amber |
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Re: FEELING DOWN.
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by Manda2 on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 08:40:12 PM AEST
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Brilliant poem, I know how long ago you wrote this lillyjane, I can only hope that you do feel better now.
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