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You Made Me
Contributed by
Loende
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Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 10:19:46 PM in AEST
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it has taken me half a lifetime
half my sanity
most of who I thought I was
to be able to say it
to admit it out loud
when I first met you
a thousand chords played in my head
and a truth was revealed
a truth that said you were my first
you were my only
you built me up, brick by brick
piece by piece
each day adding to a clean slate
each smile letting me know it was so
each time you said I love you, I believed
then came the little things
the moments got shorter
the conversations about less
the looks became fleeting
and touch was lost
You abandonded me
long before that final step
long before those heartless words
before I even knew there was a name
the minute you began to tear me down
you left, never to return
each joyful memory became a nightmare
every inner fire was snuffed
you killed the very core of me
that tiny little spark that made me
you smothered it
I believed the words, the lies
I took the blame, the fault
I knew I had failed
I wasn't enough
I wasn't anything
and now, half this lifetime later
my sanity battered yet true
when I'm just seeing who I can be
I say to you
you failed.
I am me.
Copyright ©
Loende
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2005-08-16 22:19:46]
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Re: You Made Me
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 10:23:13 PM AEST
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It is great to know that you finally realized that. We always seem to blame ourselves when something falls apart. It is not always necessarily our fault. Blessings and welcome to YPDC.
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Re: You Made Me
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 10:25:15 PM AEST
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You tell 'em like it is!! Good write with vivid imagery.
Welcome to YPDC...
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Re: You Made Me
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 10:59:40 PM AEST
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A strong first submission, mo chara. Well done!
Andrew
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Re: You Made Me
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by juliette on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 11:11:52 PM AEST
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I will read this one over and over until I find what it is about it that brought me to tears.....
amazing write hun! Can't wait to read the next one!
Thanks for sharing!
juliette |
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Re: You Made Me
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 04:11:16 AM AEST
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That verse about the millstone tied around the neck comes into mind as a good punishment.
I'll echo whatever Andrew said. In English, that is. He needs to stop saying things that only he understands. It's pointless. There, made you smile.
Take care.
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Re: You Made Me
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by brew on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 08:35:07 PM AEST
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Bravo..and well penned for the absolut point.! Well, guess, more should heed to your words. Good post, and thanks for sharing.
Brew~ |
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Re: You Made Me
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 6th September 2005 @ 09:36:20 AM AEST
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I could feel my emotions shifting with the progress of the piece; playing the nerves and blood like an instrument in the hands of a poet savant. Joy, confusion, heartache, despair, reconciliation, affirmation. All those notes so pure, resonating through the heart of the audience.
Welcome, welcome, welcome.
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Re: You Made Me
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 07:11:15 PM AEST
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WoW this is an absolutely deep, emotional and heart felt write. You go girl. I'm glad u don't blame yourself anymore. You're a brave and talented poetess and don't let anyone tell u any differently.
Hugs,
Sue, Dreamer
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Re: You Made Me
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 08:44:12 AM AEST
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| this poem is a tidal wave of emotions. at the beginning it makes you feel all warm and happy and then it brings you crashing down to earth, with a thump. an excellent poem. |
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Re: You Made Me
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 21st March 2009 @ 01:11:07 AM AEST
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| *sigh* They can't keep up that facade very long can they? The liars! You took defeat and turned it into victory! An excellent first post. |
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