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Falling Leaves
Contributed by
pixie
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Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 01:57:41 PM in AEST
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As the leaves fall around your feet,
You realise your life’s not complete,
You think of times you once though dead,
But now they live on inside your head.
You bend down and touch the leaves,
You feel inside as your soul grieves,
Emotions take over your world,
You just watch as the tears unfurl.
The leaves a colour of red and brown,
Your once bright smile turns to a frown,
As your mind casts back to memories lost,
Over your soul is cast a frost.
You stand still, so very still,
Waiting for heartache to collects its bill,
Moments go by that seem like hours,
Deep in your heart sadness flowers.
A single tear trickles down your face,
You’ve lost something you can’t replace,
The pain subsides but never dies,
And your heart is forever filled with whys?
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pixie
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by Darkhorse71 on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 02:43:24 PM AEST
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pixie, this is great! I live in Florida where it's almost summer year round and our leaves don't fall much, but I can imagine.
This poem builds in intensity and the last 2 stanzas just blew me away. Keep it up!
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 03:03:31 PM AEST
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I am sorry for your loss.
This piece truely touches on your greif and again, I wish for you strength.
Just to add...they not only live on in your head, but your heart as well.
Hugs
Jecks |
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by holderofthestone on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 03:19:02 PM AEST
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| great great poem! filled with love and sadness... touching A++++ |
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 03:42:26 PM AEST
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Wonderful Wonderful write... so well described
I sure can relate to this.. sry for you sadness
I hope you find your way to happeniness..
Keep up the awesome writing..
Huggggggs
~~~Michelle~~~ |
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by vibes2go on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 04:23:25 PM AEST
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sweet. lovely pixy with ..was it 17 tatoos? I haven't heard from you in so long .. great write.. great to see you again.. although I'm sorry it's so sad..
mary |
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by Stellar on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 05:52:41 PM AEST
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I love the imagery...beautifully sad.
Take care,
Liz |
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 05:55:37 PM AEST
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Aww, Krissie...
I was so happy when I saw you had posted...and then I saw how sad the poem was.
I do love this, Krissie, but I wish you weren't feeling so down.
Good write,
Take care of yourself, hun.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by Overstated on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 06:18:59 PM AEST
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this is a powerful piece of writting so sad yet so beautifully wrote. i agree with the last poster its always exciting to read one of your write yet they can be so sad to read!
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by juliette on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 07:04:37 PM AEST
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Why are all you people writing about me?????? LOL
Such a good write, and as someone said earlier those last two stanzas made this verse!
hOPE SOME OF YOUR WHYS ARE ANSWERED! kEEP IT UP!
Thanks for sharing!
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 07:29:10 PM AEST
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Fantastic expression in this piece Pix...each stanza outshined the last, and your emotions are well conveyed. I love this line;
"Deep in your heart sadness flowers"
Well done with this write...
Scorp. |
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 09:10:53 PM AEST
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yeh those never ending why's, nice writting
pix, deep sincere expertly crafted hints of
depression coming through so noble in it's
expression, traces of a broken heart, lovely
as usual . . .
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(((((((((Pix)))))))))
Ben |
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 01:22:52 AM AEST
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awww hugs
so much emotiom and sadness in this write.
love and hugs |
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Re: Falling Leaves
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by pander on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 08:23:53 PM AEST
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Hi Pixie,
Yep! I'm back. Good to see you're still writing. As always, I'm still loving your work.
Take care,
Pander
xxxx |
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