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Once
Contributed by
Zandria
on
Saturday, 13th August 2005 @ 07:48:29 AM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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Once upon a time
I WANTED to be your 'end all..be all'
I wanted to feel that you felt the sun rose and the moon shone only for me,
BECAUSE of me
I wanted to know that anytime of day or night,
there would not be anything I couldn't ask of you -
from you
I fully recognize this as pure fantasy
yet this fantasy NEEDED to live in my heart.
This fantasy lends to
hope
love
security
faith
for our survival into tomorrow
Small amounts of
hope
love
security
faith
yet VERY important
On a molecular level, I have been wittled away
cell by cell
my fantasies have been rendered full of holes
Breath by breath tattered
frayed
thinned into ridiculous lies
A fabrication for the highly delusional
Copyright ©
Zandria
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2005-08-13 07:48:29]
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Re: Once
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by lil_angel on
Saturday, 13th August 2005 @ 12:31:14 PM AEST
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This is a really good write! I really like this part
On a molecular level, I have been wittled away
cell by cell
my fantasies have been rendered full of holes |
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Re: Once
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by Wachumiri on
Sunday, 14th August 2005 @ 05:34:53 AM AEST
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Well done. I like the storybook opening, it caught my eye.
Take care, I´ll be back soon. See you then.
David |
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Re: Once
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by Sahara on
Sunday, 14th August 2005 @ 06:23:37 PM AEST
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| Great write! You experessed yourself brilliantly. |
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Re: Once
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by Loende on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 08:16:15 PM AEST
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Once upon a time...
You nailed it, right where it makes sense. I hope you are finding a way to mend those tears and holes. You deserve it.
Love,
Loende |
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