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The Oak
Contributed by
DarkYuke
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Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 05:56:47 AM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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High, tall, standing up,
Breaks the roof, light streams,
Branches stem and creak,
The time flows by, ages,
The time is ripe.
Fie! Foe!
Parasite, alien,
Arms stretch up,
Ties, strangles, chokes,
A cover of darkness,
Suffocate.
Gag! Choke!
Crumble and fall,
Twisted like string,
The oak succumbs,
Changes, mutilation
Dead.
Copyright ©
DarkYuke
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2005-08-12 05:56:47]
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Re: The Oak
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by bernard2 on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 06:03:26 AM AEST
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| A very sad poem but alas so true of many fine trees. Old age and mistletoe are the usual enemies of Oaks. Good write top marks from bernard2 |
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Re: The Oak
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by DarkYuke on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 06:22:30 AM AEST
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| Thanx! It's my first poem. And after some criticisms from my brother, he says that Oaks live nowhere near Strangler figs. SOrry about that guys! |
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Re: The Oak
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by Zandria on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 07:51:33 AM AEST
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| Good descriptions! |
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Re: The Oak
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by mom11159 on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 12:57:56 PM AEST
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excellent use of descriptive words showing a clear picture loved this wonderful poem so captivating in your words Excellent poem with a touch of sadness
Cathy |
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Re: The Oak
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 14th August 2005 @ 07:33:28 PM AEST
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Satan be gone.
No no, not the mighty oak.
No worries.. God saved it.
RLPoetess ; )) |
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Re: The Oak
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 14th August 2005 @ 07:38:00 PM AEST
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And may I add..
I love nature.
Glad I found your write. Very beautiful word usage.. very well expressed.. so much emotion caught up in this explosive and intense write.. I can see it plain as day. Very visual write..
RLPoetess ; )) |
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