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I Never Meant to Turn Away
Contributed by
wachumiri
on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 02:33:06 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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As blackness took my mind away
My heart procured a sight
I saw you there and heard you say
“Protect me from the night”
And in my dream I turned to you
And promised to be there
I swore to hold, to help you through
With all my strength and care
But knowing not I turn around
Right when I should look back
And you are torn down to the ground
My presence, friend, you lack
At last I turn, alas, too late!
The damage has been done
I try to raise you from this state
But now my help you shun
You look me in the eye and say:
”I needed you,
To help me through,
I needed you to hold me.
For while your back was turned on me
My soul was torn in two
My friend in need
You could not be
My friend you never were.”
I turn rejected by a friend
My heart now also dead
I swore to hold you to the end
I turned my back instead
Copyright ©
wachumiri
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by wikedladi on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 02:36:22 AM AEST
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| Such a vivid poem.. I hope you heed this warning. keep ure promise : ) |
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by emystar on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 02:36:45 AM AEST
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Very powerfull night mare that u turned into a masterpeice.
huggs, smiles,
emy
very good write. |
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 03:53:11 AM AEST
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Wow, that does sound like a scary thing to wake up to.
Well done, this. I like the first line, as it conjures up an immediate image (a dark one), that leaves a sort of first impression through the rest. It's not usual. But it works well here.
Layteh.
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by Loende on
Saturday, 13th August 2005 @ 02:10:15 AM AEST
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Wow, I bet that scared the pants off of you. When was this dream? That'd be a hard thing to shake. Excellently laid out and very well illustrated. Just know that you're very unlikely to ever let that happen to anyone you hold dear.
Dawn
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by Zandria on
Sunday, 14th August 2005 @ 05:45:30 AM AEST
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schnickies! What a rat!..JK
Nasty feelings here... alot guilt has to be coming from somewhere.
Good write. |
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by faith_my_eyes on
Monday, 15th August 2005 @ 10:28:37 AM AEST
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| This one is pretty intense. Are you doing okay? |
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by lostwithoutyou on
Monday, 15th August 2005 @ 06:28:31 PM AEST
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I hope nothing bad happens. your the closest friend I have.
Brina. |
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 07:34:31 PM AEST
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| When we dream dark dreams it is our subconscious dealing with something that is bothering us and usually comes out in a nightmarish-type of dream. Does not mean it will happen, just means you had something heavy weighing on your mind. We all dream, whether we remember it or not. Without dreams we would all lose our sanity. Just your subconscious releasing emotional stress. Rita |
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by liquidsunshine on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 12:05:26 AM AEST
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Gripping, chilling and truly frightening. I hope it's not a recurring dream; I hope it doesn't come true in any sense, either.
Love and peace,
Chelsea |
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by brokengirl on
Sunday, 21st August 2005 @ 11:56:04 PM AEST
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wow. i like the description in it. i feel like i can relate to it but not exactly sure how to explain it. i hope that is just a dream and is not true. it sounds scary to me also. its a good poem and you expressed it all well.
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by Archie on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 08:21:59 AM AEST
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| Wow! Everyday life expressed in simple verse. I hope you will be forgiven jus as I hope I will. I have been both sides of this poem the hurt and the hurtee. I hope I will be the friend in the future. |
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by anitajames on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 11:34:36 AM AEST
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| Nightmares that leave you shaking and questioning reality are the worst. I've often wished I had written my imediate thoughts after having one, but I never do. Good job. |
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 08:27:21 PM AEST
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To have a dream like this I think means that you have something heavy weighing u down. Although I'm getting to know u I think that you'd never ever turn your back to a friend in need. You've obviously got alot going on in ur mind. I hope these nightmares are not reoccuring. May ur heart and mind be erased of such vivid images. The answer is found deep within u my dear friend.
*hugs* from ur fan,
Sue |
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by Apollonia on
Sunday, 25th January 2015 @ 02:03:49 PM AEST
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Wauw
A scary dream but such an amazing poem |
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Re: I Never Meant to Turn Away
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by Socreights on
Sunday, 25th January 2015 @ 07:51:21 PM AEST
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| Great poem. Love the dream setting - reminds me somewhat of Orpheus. Eurydice. Hermes. |
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