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Failure
Contributed by
holderofthestone
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Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 09:38:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Nothing here to give
but failure and regrets
this is what I am
all I can be...
offered to the world,
trampled on
thrown away.
I give all that I can
but nothing is enough
stuck in a rut
this feeling of emptiness
hollow...
I know I'm not enough
I realize I am nothing
but they try to tell me different...
they words they say sound pretty
but they are fake...
don’t tell me that I'm smart
or how I write so well
don’t tell me that I’m special
those words don’t mean **** to me
I don’t want to hear it
id rather be alone
than have to face you everyday
I don’t know how to do this
I don’t know who to be
but I don’t want to be me anymore
when me is not enough
this is all I know...
black clouds always around
the streaming rain is soothing
if I could stay here away from them
things would be better
I wouldn’t let them down
I'm sorry this is it
all I have to offer
id rather die alone
than have to fail you everyday
and see that look on your face
I can see how I disgrace
though you'd never tell me
time away is what they need
time away from me
and then they would see
how much better life is
when I'm not there to **** things up...
it never goes away
this feeling that I have
I hate the things I do
I hate the things I say
I hate being me...
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holderofthestone
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2005-08-11 21:38:44]
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Re: Failure
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by brew on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 10:29:09 PM AEST
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Not to sound rude, but YOU do have talent............get off the feeling like your nothing.WE ALL are.......we all beat our self up, and critise even harder. Words come from the inner sould, and heart. so YES, you are a writer. This was good, even tho depressing. Saddness, is not fun, but you have to be happy within, to be happy with the outer. Trying smiling.....may be a better alternatiev. Again, sorry for the rudnes. Just my own opinion and, I try to find myself as well.!
Brew~ |
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Re: Failure
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 10:31:44 PM AEST
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| wow; very strong; through your writing i can feel what you are feeling and your not alone on this feeling. Leaves me sad but it's good thanks for sharing and they may not be better without you. (just my opinion) |
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Re: Failure
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by Archie on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 10:41:05 PM AEST
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| Okay -Youare messed up and you will always be. Okay your words suck and you would rather not have any friends (I'm just repeating your words) Is that really where you want to stay ****** up as you say in your poem. I have a lot of respect for you for writing this but it would be a real tradgedy if you stayed here. GET UP AND DO SOMETHING ABOUT IT and if you need to talk to some one -talk to me! I feel this way too and I was thinking of suicide. I want to live and I think you should want to as well, not a failed life but a good one. I don't mean to post so long a response to your poem but i want you to know how I feel and that you don't have to stay where you're at. |
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Re: Failure
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 11:25:42 PM AEST
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Well, we are our own worst enemies in life. Sounds like you have been gnawing a little too close to the bone. Failure is a personal decision. Other people can't like you until you like you. I don't know why that is so hard for people to understand. You put off bad vibes and people feel them and automatically back off. Can you blame them? Try a little happiness, works wonders in life. JMO
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Re: Failure
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by MDodgen on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 12:55:30 AM AEST
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| vivid write, but you are special. sometimes it just takes others to see how special we really are. good write, dont give up. : ) |
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Re: Failure
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by Demonic_Depression_7625 on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 02:13:10 AM AEST
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| you're really awesome at writing poetry |
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