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Your Insanity
Contributed by
faerie
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Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 12:02:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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A blank page
driving me mad,
because it has nothing to say.
I can see you as you are,
trying to embrace the ocean,
and if I were but not secretly longing
for you to be the angel
then I would remember you..
but I pretend that I don't see it,
and I do......
Me,you,I,we
know reality
that stars never cross,
and people die unhappy.
So what are we doing here?
Waiting for death to come?
A mirror of a miraje.
I shall not sit in mindless solitude.
Knock on heaven's gates,
but if you leave me,
I will never know you,
and we will be legends
agonizing in our chamber graves
and history will be as it was,
but even more so regretful...
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faerie
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2005-08-11 12:02:33]
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Re: Your Insanity
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by SirensLight on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 12:08:31 PM AEST
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| Well done. It wraps you up in it and pulss you along through the imagery. |
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Re: Your Insanity
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 01:16:10 PM AEST
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| Okie dokie, this was a good poem, I liked it, good write. |
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Re: Your Insanity
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by Archie on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 02:54:18 PM AEST
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I see in your writing the longing for friendship and the reality of truth. There is only one thing missing forgiveness
"but if you leave me I will never know you and legends we will be"
These words strike me as giving no opportunity for friendship. Though I have been known to be wrong. And the only reason I say this is because I have written similar in some of my own poems. This is a very strong write and shows a lot of emotion. |
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Re: Your Insanity
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by In_a_while on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 03:52:36 PM AEST
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I like the poem a lot! I especially liked the lines:
I can see you as you are
trying to embrace the ocean
Very strong imagery and thought... what did it have to do with? was you looking at yourself or someone else?
Thanks for sharing this piece.. you're very good and i look forward to reading more!
dw |
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