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DELICATE RED SKY
Contributed by
lostrelic
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Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 06:24:18 AM in AEST
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Another night another rhyme
one great way to ease my mind
Stress from the life that i lead
burden on my soul oh does it bleed
Sins and past torments filling my mind
trying to escape the life i left behind
From the day i was born i hated this life
watching my world getting stabed by a knife
still nursing this wound from long times been gone
knowing that freedom wont soon be to long
the prision is loneliness that has traped me so
if i can escape i will never know
but alone i walk never looking back
escaping the world that has slipped threw the crack
One candle light just me and the flame
sitting alone i have no one to blame
cold is my heart black has it gone
me in my cell this time oh so long
But these chains are in my mind i can be set free
one day world you will soon meet me
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2005-08-11 06:24:18]
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Re: DELICATE RED SKY
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by MnMnMsrcool on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 09:09:24 AM AEST
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| I like this poem alot. It says alot. good job and keep writing. |
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Re: DELICATE RED SKY
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 01:24:52 PM AEST
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| I loved this poem, it was beautiful. SLipSiX. |
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Re: DELICATE RED SKY
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by SirensLight on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 02:21:09 PM AEST
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| Wow... your poem really spoke to me.. reminded me of a different time in my life... hopefully if your feeling like your poem states then you find a way to become a Houdini and escape those chains. |
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Re: DELICATE RED SKY
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by anitajames on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 03:59:38 PM AEST
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"Another night another rhyme
one great way to ease my mind
Stress from the life that i lead
burden on my soal oh does it bleed
Sins and past torments filling my mind
trying to escape the life i left behind"
This is exactly how I feel about writing.
Great Write! |
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Re: DELICATE RED SKY
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by mom11159 on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 10:44:13 PM AEST
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loved this your emotions so very clear your rhyming as well as your flow perfect. Hope you find a way out of this down feeling and sadness. Your words so captivated kept me interested until your last word
great job
smile
Cathy |
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Re: DELICATE RED SKY
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by emystar on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 06:23:35 AM AEST
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Sounds serious.
Awesome writing, friend.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: DELICATE RED SKY
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by hardrocker15198916 on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 10:09:36 PM AEST
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perfect in what you were trying to say
but i dont think its angry
but its still good
* thumbs up*
-->Rae |
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