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When the world dies off...
Contributed by
holderofthestone
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Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 03:54:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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If the world stops revolving
and the stars fall to the ground
would you think of me as everything fades
when there's no one else around
when the sun is burning out
and the skies no longer clear
will you be longing for my touch
as the world around you disappears
when the waves stop pounding shores
and there's nothing there to see
will I be in your thoughts
will you be there thinking of me...
when the leaves fall from their branches
and the trees all fade and die
will you remember how the sun shined
when it glimmered in my eyes
and when there nothing left to see
when everything is finally passed
will my love for you be remembered
will it be the one thing that lasts...
for as the world around me crumbles
and I know there's nothing more to do
the only thing that I will miss
will be sharing this world with you...
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Re: When the world dies off...
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by emystar on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 04:38:38 AM AEST
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Very sweet masterpeice.
huggs,
emy
The luv just takes the stem of the Earth going into blitherens. Good work and very creative. |
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Re: When the world dies off...
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by bernard2 on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 05:29:45 AM AEST
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| Wonderful wordsmanship keep on writing this one is worth the utmost praise. From bernard 2 |
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Re: When the world dies off...
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by Archie on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 06:00:03 AM AEST
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This is a great poem and reminds me of a song
"You asked how much I love you
Must I explain
I love you oh my darling
like roses need rain
You ask how long i'll love you
I'll tell you true
Until the twelf of never
Is how long I'll love you"
Songg Excerpt "Until the twelf of never" by Johnny Mathis |
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Re: When the world dies off...
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by lostrelic on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 06:33:36 AM AEST
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| great poem alot of heart shown very nice write |
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Re: When the world dies off...
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by anitajames on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 09:10:48 AM AEST
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| I love this poem. My poems are usually written in anger so I really admire work that shows longing and real love. Good Job! |
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Re: When the world dies off...
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by CarolinaBlue on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 10:30:10 AM AEST
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I enjoyed this read, I thought it to be well written and flowed very nicely...I believe most people to have these thoughts at some point in their life, especially with those that they love more than themselves. Very good job, keep writing.
~Blue~ |
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Re: When the world dies off...
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by MDodgen on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 05:48:03 PM AEST
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| wonderful write. good use of words. very poetic, good job. : ) |
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Re: When the world dies off...
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 07:04:59 PM AEST
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| you have taken my breath away again w/ your writing. Very beautiful; love it. no other words can express it. 5 stars |
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Re: When the world dies off...
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by wikedladi on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 09:23:40 PM AEST
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| This is a great write.. every line is so descriptive.. it paints a picture of love and despair |
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Re: When the world dies off...
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 12:05:17 PM AEST
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I like the way the words and thoughts flow out in near seamless fashion as they are read. Some poetry is kinda tough to read especially out loud but the tempoand rhythm of this piece seems relaxed and easy. Beautiful longing.
D.Sapelo |
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Re: When the world dies off...
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by LiL_Rebel on
Saturday, 10th December 2005 @ 12:28:37 PM AEST
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| BEAUTIFUL |
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