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Silent Screams
Contributed by
fromhopes2hopeless
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Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 01:40:18 AM in AEST
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We run these same races
At the same paces
Time and distance put us at two different places
So, look to the sky and we see the same stars
But no matter how loud I scream, space won't let you hear me.
I'm screaming "I love you's" to the top of my lungs,
While gasping for a new breath of life.
These silent screams have gone unnoticed,
So put time and space aside for a moment,
Sit with me on this cloud, until death do us part
And I'll pull down the stars for you
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Re: Silent Screams
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by rockergirl94 on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 02:07:10 AM AEST
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This poem really describes long distance relationships (or just plain being away from someone). I love the line,
"So, look to the sky and we see the same stars
But no matter how loud I scream, space won't let you hear me."
It really puts things in perspective and pretty much sums up the poem. You can feel so close to a person, but yet be so far away. I love your ending line as well, and how it goes back to something mentioned above in the poem.
Keep writing
- Julie |
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Re: Silent Screams
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by holderofthestone on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 02:39:20 AM AEST
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| deep, i can relate at this point in time."These silent screams have gone unnoticed" niecly said... it hurts |
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Re: Silent Screams
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by Archie on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 06:24:56 AM AEST
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| This is a great poem. Long distance takes a lot of work from both sides. Sadly usually one side gives up before the other does. |
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Re: Silent Screams
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by CarolinaBlue on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 11:17:11 AM AEST
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Wow~ I can really relate to this write being that I have been involved in a long distance relationship now for almost a year. Awaiting next month when we will be together permanently. Can't tell you how many times I have felt like this paritcular line in your write:
I'm screaming "I love you's" to the top of my lungs,
While gasping for a new breath of life.
Good write, and I hope you're not apart for too long.
~Blue~
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Re: Silent Screams
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 05:48:07 PM AEST
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Nice write.. Missin someone so badly takes a toll on your everyday life...
Keep your chin up... time knows no meaning of Love..
wishing you best of luck.. keep up the writing..
~~~Michelle~~~ |
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Re: Silent Screams
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by Sahara on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 05:51:20 PM AEST
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Great write, I especially liked *I'm screaming "I love you's" to the top of my lungs,
While gasping for a new breath of life.*
Many of us have been there.
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