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Lost
Contributed by
holderofthestone
on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 10:57:13 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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im a constant dissapointment
while you pass me by in time
you see me on the side lines
no place for me
why is this so hard
this world that i must face
this anger gets replaced
by my failures in life
im so lost
no idea where i should be
no path for me to follow
the hatred is hard to swallow
I leave a trail of mistakes
so others know where i have been
no choice but to give in
no need in going on
its to much to face alone
this world is so cold
I hate myself so much
more that I hate them
I can never be more
this is it
accept it
deal with it
Ive learned to...
so angry with myself
I hate who Ive become
this disgraceful image
staring back at me
the only thing i see
this monster
I cant destroy myself
I think that im too weak
I would if i could
this feeling of nothing
over flowing from the dark
taking over my heart
just leave me in the past
love will never last
it all comes to an end
give it enough time
a chance is all i need
to show you i am nothing
ive become so much
less than i was
i will never recover
ill find a way to end it
time slips by
no need to cry...
nothings lost
nothing but me...
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2005-08-10 22:57:13]
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Re: Lost
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by Taurusgem1 on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 11:08:12 PM AEST
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| very sad you can fell the emotion radiating from this good write |
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Re: Lost
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by Jane_Doe on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 11:13:18 PM AEST
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| Lovely figurative language. It's an awful way to feel but things will get better so allow yourself to find that light. Nice write, |
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Re: Lost
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by waos on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 11:29:30 PM AEST
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I thought you did some good work with getting things to flow,
and having the lines go together well, a bit of a use of rhyming,
which is nice sometimes. You were honest in it too, that's good.
Keep writing, it helps me through feelings like that.
~Kara~~Waos~ |
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Re: Lost
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 01:08:16 AM AEST
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| This is really sad and made me cry. It was good writing and I could feel your emotions. You are always someone to somebody even if you are not aware of it and they should make you aware. There are people out there who think that you are better than what you think you are and there will be brighter days. loved the poem even if it made me sad :( |
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Re: Lost
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by wikedladi on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 02:58:13 AM AEST
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Even in the darkest of night... You'll find a light
Look a little harder... An you will see
Nothing is Truly lost. |
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Re: Lost
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by brew on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 03:24:04 PM AEST
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Good write, that describes things that some feel. You sometimes, need to look at life differ. We all are loved and cherished in many ways, and in our own ways.! The worse is our self that takes judgement. Dont tear your self down so badly. You are a special one........see you have talent in writing.
Brew~ |
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Re: Lost
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by RainDancer2005 on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 05:48:19 PM AEST
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| I honestly know how you feel. My parents were always telling me that I was the mistake of the family. My brother and sister could do no wrong. Everyone told me I would amount to nothing but they are wrong. I don't need them to make something for myself. I just graduated high school and I am getting ready to go to college!!! So just igonore all the people who leave you out or make you feel as though you will never amount to anything!!! |
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Re: Lost
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by MDodgen on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 05:50:43 PM AEST
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| heart wrenching write, you should never give up. there are people out there who think the world of you. good write, nice images. keep your head up, it will get better. |
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