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Violent Heaven
Contributed by
dthwlkr
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Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 12:40:18 PM in AEST
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Silent stars set upon the endless clouds that gaze upon the world tonight
"O" violent heaven resting on the silver rays of the moon so bright
Bleed for me "O" heaven bleed for me tonight
Because I cant feel life anymore
In my broken shattered soul
there is no light of hope within
I wonder why did my life begin
So "O Violent Heaven" bleed for me tonight,
O heaven bleed your heart dry
My eyes still searching through the sky
staring, not knowing what i hope to see
yet pitiless the violent heaven still stares down on me
But "O" Violent Heaven won't you bleed for me........Won't you bleed for me tonight????
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dthwlkr
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2005-08-10 12:40:18]
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Re: Violent Heaven
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by Zandria on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 01:34:05 PM AEST
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The repetition may have gone one phrase too much, but the body of this piece is excellent.
The word 'Fluid' comes to mind! (with that one exception)
Great work! |
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Re: Violent Heaven
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by imaginary on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 01:49:10 PM AEST
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| I think its great that you wrote a poem about the event. I also like the idea of violent heaven... good write. |
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Re: Violent Heaven
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by GurlyTye on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 03:21:02 PM AEST
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| i really enjoyed this peice it is very powerfull |
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Re: Violent Heaven
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by deathbringer on
Tuesday, 15th November 2005 @ 10:09:51 AM AEST
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| A painfull subject to this poem but that's what makes it so beautifull.Suffering was and will remain the best source of inspiration for poems and with this one it's more than just pain of one man ... i think it represents the pain of all the victims of that bombing and the suffering of their loved ones.Nicely done |
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