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About A Girl
Contributed by
lisa99460
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Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 02:01:37 AM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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This is about a girl
A girl that appears so put together, but
is so torn apart in places people can’t see.
A girl that is never satisfied with everything
or anything at all as a matter of fact.
Something’s missing...
This is about a girl
A girl that has something eating at her, but
has no idea what that something is.
A girl that pushes people away, but
only when they try to pull her close.
Something’s wrong...
This is about a girl
A girl that needs so much reassurance
when there’s nothing to be assured of.
A girl that loves her life, but
hates the way she’s living.
Something’s happening...
This is about a girl
A girl that I see every so often
every time I glance at my reflection.
A girl that I know pretty well
she actually reminds me a lot of myself.
Something’s changing...
This is about me
A girl that has so much to be happy about
and so much to make her unhappy.
Something needs to be done...
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lisa99460
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2005-08-10 02:01:37]
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Re: About A Girl
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by Ineedanap on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 02:03:53 AM AEST
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Amazing. I can definitely relate. Great write
Brooke |
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Re: About A Girl
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by princessjoy85 on
Monday, 22nd August 2005 @ 07:37:50 AM AEST
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| Hey, I can totally relate to this poem of yours. It sounds like you've had some "out of body" experiences while looking in the mirror. Also, it sounds like you desire intimacy, but fear it way too much to accept it when offered to you. (As do I). I like your consistency with the first line, and last line of every stanza. Towards the end you sounded as if you look down upon yourself for being unhappy. That's just rediculous if you ask me, though I've done the same. It's like hating yourself for being a deep, introspective, philosophical, and spiritual person. Don't hate, desire more until you're blue in the face. Okay, that's all I have for now. If you want to read any of my work I recently submitted a poem called "Split." Check it out, let me know your thoughts. Thank you, and keep writing, I enjoy your work. |
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