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That Night
Contributed by
HatchetGirl
on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 01:07:20 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Within one night, you ruined my life
you took what I knew so well
and cumpled it up like paper
You hated me and called me names
for everything that happened
but it's your fault not mine
You told me to meet you there
we were suppose to go to Mainstream
but you lied, we weren't going to leave
You made me call my parents
to ask them to sleep at your house
we never went to your house
in fact we were only a block away from mine
So many lies were told that night
people broke-up and got used
no one cared we'd been drinking
You got mad at him so we left
four people stuffed in the backseat
two touching eachother, not noticed
Sitting and talking in one room
hours flew by, someone went home
that would be the last time we talked
We laied down to try to fall asleep
two girls and a guy in the middle
I was not sleepy and niether was he
So many mistakes were made that night
but I would not change that night itself
I'd just change the things that went wrong
Copyright ©
HatchetGirl
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2005-08-10 01:07:20]
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Re: That Night
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by Jane_Doe on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 04:12:12 AM AEST
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| I'm so sorry that you had to deal with such a sad sad story. Nice way to tell the story, though. |
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Re: That Night
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by Kitty06 on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 10:26:48 AM AEST
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| This poem gives you the feeling of the main character being jostled and bumped by the other people in the poem. Like the main character was half unwilling to go along with everything but didn't want to cause an uproar with the others. It's so sad, I'm sorry that you can't change that night. It sounds like the night was you stuck between a rock and a hard place the whole time. Keep posting! |
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Re: That Night
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by colinbaker62 on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 11:26:35 AM AEST
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A nicely written expression of inner feelings.
Colin |
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