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The Unseen Battle.
Contributed by
corbin286
on
Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 01:20:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Supressed feelings screaming inside.
An unseen battle changing the tide.
Swords clash, wind quakes.
Razors slash, skin breaks.
Blood falls as rain pelts the earth.
Ready to die a last breath I take.
waiting to fly the jump is taken.
Still alive the earth is shaken.
Copyright ©
corbin286
... [
2003-01-13 13:20:00]
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Re: The Unseen Battle.
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by SmokinJoeEvil on
Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 01:29:01 PM AEST
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| Strong images of internal battle... though a bit of a death-wish-like undercurrent... nice poem! |
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Re: The Unseen Battle.
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by aernby on
Tuesday, 14th January 2003 @ 06:53:47 PM AEST
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good descriptio of a frightening state ===
remember, if you need helpou can get help
good write
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Re: The Unseen Battle.
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by tease_whizz on
Friday, 17th January 2003 @ 04:05:33 PM AEST
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| i've read a lot of your poetry on here and i really love your style of writing - simple but with such a lot of depth and strength of emotion. i can relate to a lot of what you say - i hope you don't always feel like this...keep writing, Kate xxx |
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