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Stranger In The Shadows
Contributed by
PsychoticDreamz
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Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 12:40:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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As I creep up on a guy in the street
I start slicing him from head to toe
All the blood flowing out
watch him to die slow
As he lies there gasping
I ask right to his face
"Dont you know to be inside after dark,
Its not safe"
He'll learn after this
someone has called 911
I put my knife away
as from the scence I run
I manage to find a car
with the keys inside
I have a grin on my face
me in my new ride
I go a few miles
no one knows where Im going
where I am at anytime
Beware walking down the streets you'll be knowing..
Im not far behind...
So watch your back at night
U know I'll be there
This is my warning to you
Just Beware
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PsychoticDreamz
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2003-01-13 12:40:00]
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Re: Stranger In The Shadows
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by SmokinJoeEvil on
Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 01:18:10 PM AEST
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| If you were watching him until, however slowly, he died, then he would be dead and his learning anything from what you may have done would be an entirely moot point. Now he'll remember to stay inside after dark? Inside his coffin maybe. Unless he didn't die because some one called 911 or whatever... but this is not too clear. So anyway... kudos to the subject of the poem for slilcin' a guy up for no good reason. |
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Re: Stranger In The Shadows
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by chantel on
Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 09:29:42 PM AEST
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| i think tis is a good one don't listent to other people i see where you are coming from on th three dimentional thing but there is a good point the other guy made when he sai what leson did he learn ? |
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Re: Stranger In The Shadows
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 09:29:47 PM AEST
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| i think tis is a good one don't listent to other people i see where you are coming from on th three dimentional thing but there is a good point the other guy made when he sai what leson did he learn ? |
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Re: Stranger In The Shadows
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by PsychoticDreamz on
Monday, 20th January 2003 @ 12:48:09 AM AEST
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| I meant that he WAS dying, but the ambulance or whoever, actually saved him since someone had called 911 and reported it...and since he did live..he learnt some times its just not safe..plus next time someone might not be around to call..Sorry about the confusion...I was half asleep when I wrote it.. |
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Re: Stranger In The Shadows
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by BlackFire9786 on
Saturday, 12th July 2003 @ 02:57:09 PM AEST
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| Another great write, totally my style of writing, i love it! Even if the lesson he learned isn't explained too well, it is still an awesome poem! Keep writing~Lisa |
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