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Creeping Darkness
Contributed by
sprinter27
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Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 01:41:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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I feel it coming onto me,
It’s becoming hard to see
I can barely move at all
I wonder when I’m going to fall
The darkness is surrounding
My heart starts pounding
I wave my hand in front of my face
But I can’t see it moving or in place
Darkness swallowing me whole,
Eating up my mind and my soul
I can’t find any one in the never-ending night
Not a single soul, not even a little bit of light
The darkness is all around,
Making me fall to the ground,
Pushing me so I fall down,
Laughing at my frown
The frown that I can feel but not see,
Because darkness is all around me
It leaves me all alone,
I’m all on my own
Nothing but darkness
And all of its blackness
All I see is black, not light
Not even a little white
I feel it coming onto me,
It’s becoming hard to see
I can barely move at all
I wonder when I’m going to fall
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Re: Creeping Darkness
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by vibes2go on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 01:53:38 PM AEST
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| I could feel this .. good write. |
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Re: Creeping Darkness
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by bernard2 on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 02:00:29 PM AEST
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| Most excellent poem, keep writing like this and you will never fall my friend greetings from bernard2 |
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Re: Creeping Darkness
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 02:51:30 PM AEST
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Oh wow Sprints! I think this is my new favourite from you! You get better with each and every write...I was swept up in this one, you made the darkness come alive. A dark write indeed, but you wrote it with a wonderful style, and kept a good flow and rhyme scheme...All the while bringing your emotions to light (no pun intended : ) ) with your well chosen words...Well done!!
Scorp. |
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Re: Creeping Darkness
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by AshRayne on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 03:33:09 PM AEST
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wow, ive read a couple of you works, and i must say that i like thi sone alot. *Praise*
Exquisite writing that is your gift, be blessed, for you are perfection.
~Ash |
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Re: Creeping Darkness
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by Misunderstood_gurl on
Saturday, 13th August 2005 @ 12:24:48 AM AEST
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| how many times do i have to say it? AWESOME! i liked how u repeated the first stanza and the end of the poem. and dont worry i wont let the darkness surround you....I'll shine a flashlight and you wont be alone...i'll be with you! ^ ^ |
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