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just a dream
Contributed by
bleeding_corset
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Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 12:11:48 PM in AEST
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forever within the darkness
imprisoned in a cell
hidden amongst the shadows
lies my twisted hell
waiting in an abyss
for something thats not there
someone to understand me
& actually show they care
as if that'll happen
forever just a dream
because im the only one
who hears my silent scream
and my solitude grows worse
each & everyday
breaking down my walls
making me its prey
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Re: just a dream
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 12:34:42 PM AEST
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| Great write. If you happen to read one of mine read "Staring into the abyss" I think you will like it. |
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Re: just a dream
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 12:56:21 PM AEST
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| Very nice little piece. I quite enjoyed it. Peace to you. Laura |
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Re: just a dream
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by EricBRamey on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 01:27:36 PM AEST
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| Harsh stuff...but the imagery is strong...and I can feel the pain in your words. I can't say I like your poem...it's not a "like" kind of write, but I respect it...thanks for the contribution...Eric |
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Re: just a dream
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by vibes2go on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 01:49:17 PM AEST
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I think we all have a silent scream that no one hears..
I liked your rhyme pattern.. |
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Re: just a dream
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by Writting_Fever on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 02:32:16 PM AEST
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| everyone i bet feels like this once and a while. good write |
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Re: just a dream
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by brokenwings on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 02:59:04 PM AEST
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| i felt your pain, good write |
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Re: just a dream
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by anitajames on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 03:39:59 PM AEST
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| I can feel the despair and pain in your words. I hope that this was wwritten during a hard time, and you are now better. |
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Re: just a dream
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by lillyjane on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 04:21:47 PM AEST
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I wrote a similar poem to this, I was feeling a
bit low at the time, hope you do not feel this way..Very good poem. |
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Re: just a dream
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 09:55:52 PM AEST
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| amazing poem from the first stanza to the last. excellent piece of work here. your first stanza i really liked the most in this. your ending was very good indeed. a good concept well portrayed. |
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Re: just a dream
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 04:07:58 PM AEST
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I reallyt like this one, especially the first stanza. I do wish it would go on more, it almost doesn't seem like it's finished. If you ever write more for this, please let me know.
Take care.
David |
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