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i dont wanna go home tonite
Contributed by
Don
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Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 11:29:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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i don't wanna go home tonite
cos i know what i'll see...
the tired old man in the mirror
always there waiting on me
so sometimes i stay out late
hoping that he'll go to bed
cos when i come home drunk at nite
he scares me he looks half dead
and lately he's looking worse
im getting worried bout him
he's lookin even more tired
tired pale and thin
maybe i think ill move
maybe get a new home
but if i went and did that
the poor guy would be all alone
and i don't wanna hurt him
i wish he'd just let me be
sometimes i hate to admit it
but the old guy looks like me
this guy should just get a life
find a new place to live
if he could ever get it together
im sure he'd have so much to give
i dont wanna go home tonite
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Don
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Re: i dont wanna go home tonite
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by emystar on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 11:33:20 PM AEST
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Very sad but awesomely written.
Hope u feel better soon.
huggs,
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Re: i dont wanna go home tonite
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by xLSDx on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 11:38:55 PM AEST
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| Love it. Very expressive. Really made me feel what you were feeling. And at times I feel the same way. Great write. |
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Re: i dont wanna go home tonite
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by Archie on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 11:49:26 PM AEST
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Great write. I understand how you feel.
In all honesty we need the mirror for with out it we would not have a proper view of ourselves.
Great write |
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Re: i dont wanna go home tonite
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by anitajames on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 12:16:40 AM AEST
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| Makes me want to cry. It is so easy to disassociate from the ugliness within ourselves isn't it? |
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Re: i dont wanna go home tonite
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by mckayla on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 12:29:06 AM AEST
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Great write! I could feel every word you wrote I felt your write even though I have never expierienced this.
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Re: i dont wanna go home tonite
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by Silent-No-More on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 01:05:14 AM AEST
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Years ago - I sat in my car, in some random parking lot, at about 1:00 a.m. and started writing. I began... with that same first line. Up until just a moment ago, I would have told you that it was someone other than myself that I was avoiding. Now... I'm rather certain it wasn't. (Thank you... for that)
I found this very intelligent and remarkably human. And... for the record, I have a feeling that guy at your house isn't so awful... I suspect he has something to give you (actually, as evidenced here... I think he probably already has).
Hoping you find your way back home --- and --- wishing to welcome you to YPDC (a second home to many of us)!
~Snemmy
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Re: i dont wanna go home tonite
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by THORN on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 07:29:01 AM AEST
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Fantastic!! I think that person you avoid does not to HOW to give you what he would want to - love. I am assuming he is your father from what I have read in you looking like him, but I think you should take care of him and not see him as a burden. He would be ever grateful in return.
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Re: i dont wanna go home tonite
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by In_a_while on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 11:58:33 AM AEST
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Wow, it's well written and very honest. It seemed so haunting too, with the imagery that could seen in the mirror...
i'm sure more than a few of us have felt the same way at some time or another.
i hope everything goes well for you
dw
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