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THE MOMENT OF DEATH
Contributed by
CrippinBabi513
on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 09:45:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
self-harmpoetry
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my moment of death
has finally arrived
i scream from the pain
i twist and i writhe
i took the plundge
my final dive
my moment of death
has finally arrived
my moment of death
is finally here
my bones will break
my muscles tear
soon to be freed
gone numb, no fear
my moment of death
is finally here
my moment of death
has finally gone
my life was hell
everything went wrong
but now no worries
for im long gone
my moment of death
has finally gone
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Re: THE MOMENT OF DEATH
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 09:58:31 PM AEST
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| i absolutely hate repetition in almost every case, but this made the 2 percent category where i actually didnt mind it at all. in your first stanza, i liked the the rhymes used most. i like the transition used in this to get from the beginning to restating it at the end with a twist. |
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Re: THE MOMENT OF DEATH
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by shereenjacinda on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 09:59:50 PM AEST
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| Tragic and well written. I really like the rhyming in this. It doesn't seem forced like a lot of poetry does. |
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Re: THE MOMENT OF DEATH
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 10:43:21 PM AEST
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powerful write!!!
i like the repetition, it adds emphasis and emotion.
dark write, and yes sometimes the end seems better than what we have now.
well done, I really liked it, and the rhyme was well composed.
Good job! |
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Re: THE MOMENT OF DEATH
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by xXxmegsxXx on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 02:29:34 PM AEST
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| wow, i really like this. its a great poem, well done. |
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Re: THE MOMENT OF DEATH
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by ICEKASH on
Saturday, 31st December 2011 @ 08:37:49 AM AEST
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| Death. The biggest mystry that there is . Nicely done but wrongly stated. |
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