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You Don’t Know Me
Contributed by
AshRayne
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Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 01:12:48 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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You tell me that I’m normal,
But you don’t know me
I’m not the little girl,
That I used to be.
I’m a different person now,
You have seen to that.
You made me a different shape.
You know it for a fact.
I’m not miss sunshine anymore.
I’m not a little princess.
You abandoned me,
You caused all of this stress.
I finally found a way,
To lose all the pain.
It’s not a normal thing,
It’s not a childish game.
In this unique piece,
Thought has gone into.
Life is no piece of cake,
And some things it makes you do.
It bends, and winds.
And the fences should stay strong.
But then again in my case,
I think I waited to long.
I need a figure,
To look towards.
I do want,
My life to move forward.
You didn’t understand,
So please just let me be.
You told me I was normal,
But you don’t know me.
Copyright ©
AshRayne
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2005-08-08 13:12:48]
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Re: You Don’t Know Me
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 01:19:10 PM AEST
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thats right people should not judge .
well done |
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Re: You Don’t Know Me
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by lostinmyself on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 01:19:44 PM AEST
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I like the first and end lines, a lot. It seems to make the poem very final.
I think it's sad how much people change others (Or try to).
This is a strong poem.
Good for you,
Phil.
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Re: You Don’t Know Me
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 03:55:29 PM AEST
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| I read this poem, I really liked it, you chose your words very well, I liked the feelings and emotions throughout this poem, very good write. SLipSiX rating. |
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Re: You Don’t Know Me
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 04:12:28 PM AEST
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| Beautiful... I know exactly how you feel... love the rhythm... well done!!! |
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Re: You Don’t Know Me
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by solosoul on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 06:50:57 PM AEST
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| this one i like ! very nice |
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Re: You Don’t Know Me
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by Ineedanap on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 07:08:43 PM AEST
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Nice poem. One criticism- it didn't really hook the reader. use some more strong adjectives. Good write
Brooke |
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