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Why.....
Contributed by
Writting_Fever
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Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 05:26:13 PM in AEST
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Three in the morning,
Not a soul in site,
You're feeling like a black hell,
In the middle of the night,
Praying for a miricle,
Hoping she's alive,
Saying it should be me,
Who told her wrong from right,
I should be there with you,
Holding your young hand,
In the hospital room,
Try to take it like a man,
What made you want to do this,
To sneak out in the night,
Risking all your life's worth,
Then stab it with a knife,
They found you in ditch,
Covered in your blood,
The car was back away from you,
You flew out on the first "thud",
All we can do is pray,
Asking God to see us through,
Our lives would be so different,
If we had to loose you,
It's a leason you can learn,
As we sit here and cry,
But please, dear God, we're begging you,
We don't want to say good-bye.
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Re: Why.....
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by Archie on
Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 05:29:48 PM AEST
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| This is very good. I am a little too choked up to say more than that. Your poem shows that you have a great heart for you friend and those around you. |
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Re: Why.....
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by paul_x_walker on
Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 06:32:06 PM AEST
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very interesting i like it
good job |
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Re: Why.....
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 10:36:41 PM AEST
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yes some people learn a lesson the hard way....your words were filled with truth....
a great write, i enjoyed reading it....
all my prayers for your friend. |
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Re: Why.....
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 10:40:37 PM AEST
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| certainly isnt worth it. excellent transition. your second stanza stood out to me the most. |
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Re: Why.....
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by twisted_dreams on
Wednesday, 10th August 2005 @ 11:23:29 PM AEST
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this poem is amazing.. i know how hard of a subject this is.. but to see how you wrote and expained it so well is amazing! im just so glad that she's ok! Keep up the good work! LYLAS
~!*Sidney*!~ |
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