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Seeing the light
Contributed by
smilez101
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Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 01:56:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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Is it hard to understand that there are certain things that I won’t tolerate especially from you?
You tell me that you will change but your old ways continue.
They say that good things will happen if you are patient but I’ve waited way too long.
How long must it take for me to realize that this relationship is going wrong?
I loved you on purpose, I was open for a reason.
All of the love that we once shared is gone.
You used to be the sweetest person, the way that you act now I don’t understand.
You live your life foolishly, now it’s time to finally grow up and be a man!
You used me for all that I had and gave me nothing but reasons to cry.
No longer will I wait up at night asking reasons why.
My love, my feelings, my emotions is all to delicate to have thrown in my face.
The task is complicated but it’s time to put you in your place.
Things can’t go this way anymore because I’ve changed.
It’s time for me to take my own path and for you to go your separate way.
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Re: Seeing the light
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by Archie on
Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 02:14:39 PM AEST
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| Good poem. My mom died before I got a chance to say all the things I wanted to say to her. I am glad things are working out with your mom. |
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Re: Seeing the light
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by mytento1 on
Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 02:49:09 PM AEST
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| Your poem has good rhyme but would be easier reading if not so wordy. Check your lines for ways of saying the same thing in less words. It will become easier to read. Just suggestions...........keep writing! |
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