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Don't Cry
Contributed by
HatchetGirl
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Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 04:53:39 PM in AEST
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Tears that should flow like the rapids
are held back from the eye of the world
I have no tears for broken hearts, bones, or promises
because these eyes no longer cry... for you
The heart that should care for everyone
has become as cold as an icy snow storm
so go away.... and leave me alone
I don't care about anyone or anything anymore
Don't you like what I've become?
why are you trying to change me back?
it's because of you I've become this
I swear I'll never go back as long as you live
I am this monster that you've created
all your hate and lies fuel my anger
tears no longer leave my eyes and my heart doesn't care
when the subject is you all I see is blood
So, here's a knife
kill me now
and take my life
I don't care how
just end this strife
Copyright ©
HatchetGirl
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2005-08-06 16:53:39]
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Re: Don't Cry
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by smilez101 on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 05:59:37 PM AEST
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| I really don't know what to say. It's real deep. I'm sorry that you feel like this. |
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Re: Don't Cry
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by colinbaker62 on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 06:00:06 PM AEST
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Hi Hatch. This is a very DARK yet hopeful poem, but one that also makes me worry about you a little.
I do hope that time and discussion between you and the other party will lead to a happier future. I'm sure it will. You are already on the road to a potentially better tomorrow in my view, as you clearly recognise that something is not right somewhere.
Good luck
Colin |
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Re: Don't Cry
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by liquidsunshine on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 07:22:43 PM AEST
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A dark poem pulled off without making me feel like it's just another cliche. Superb. Bravo!
Love and peace,
Chelsea |
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Re: Don't Cry
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by Amanda_Interrupted on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 08:04:59 PM AEST
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| Wow. |
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Re: Don't Cry
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by poisonpen00ad on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 09:01:08 PM AEST
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Great work. I enjoyed it very much.
C. |
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Re: Don't Cry
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by sprinter27 on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 10:33:33 PM AEST
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wow... powerful write, extremely amazing!!! i, too, know how you feelthis was a great write... even though it's full of anger and pain... great write, keep up the good work!!
lots of luck sent to you!
~sprints |
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Re: Don't Cry
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by sukalaa on
Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 12:23:32 AM AEST
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| Wow! This is a very dark but excellent poem, very touching and I’m sure some can relate to it too. Best of luck.
Elaila |
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Re: Don't Cry
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 12:56:58 AM AEST
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So lively,and well written too.I felt feelings all over again once i read this,great way of expression.I understand how you've felt.keep writng.t/c.peace.
love,
andrea |
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Re: Don't Cry
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by AshRayne on
Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 06:00:43 PM AEST
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i can relate to what you feel. my issue is with my dad. he turned me into an icy beast as well, but my mother helped me realize that there is beauty in this world, we just have to take the time to see it.
i too spent alot of time writing things like this that expressed deep dark emotions. don't let the darkness become you, keep one foot in the light. good luck in the future,
exquisite writing that is your gift, be blessed, for you are perfection.
~Ash |
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Re: Don't Cry
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by Pretty_n_pink on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 03:33:10 PM AEST
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| nice poem. i like it. i understand you. if you ever want to talk you can pm me anytime. great poem keep it up |
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