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Beautiful Stormy death
Contributed by
HiddenDeath999
on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 11:06:03 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Cold night with pouring rain,
feeling the lightning in every vein
The wind howls and thunder roars,
but no need to hide and stay indoors
I stand outside with my arms open wide,
releasing my hurt and burn inside
I scream out loud it feels good,
it brings my joy more than anything on earth could
The wind blows harder and lightning strikes close,
I stand there froze
I look up and rain drops beat down at my cheeks,
I try to open my eyes and yet again thunder speaks
It shakes the earth hard like never before,
A stay I havent had enough and want more
Lightning strikes and hits me hard,
morning comes and mother has a dead girl in the yard
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HiddenDeath999
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2005-08-06 11:06:03]
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Re: Beautiful Stormy death
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 11:11:23 AM AEST
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This is an awesome write.
The line "I stand there froze" is unnecessary I find, but, this piece is great nonetheless.
Keep it up!
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Re: Beautiful Stormy death
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by trini on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 12:35:38 PM AEST
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very nice write..but i do agree with Daniela_Maria_Violin "I stand there froze" is a bit unnecessary but it still fits with the mystery in this poem. keep it up.
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