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Daddy
Contributed by
JBH
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Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 03:18:52 AM in AEST
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Why did you yell?
Was that what you really meant to say?
Do I mean nothing to you?
Am I not worthy of your praise?
Was I a bad son dad?
Did I not make you proud?
Then why did you treat me like *****
Forever cast me behind the shroud
Was I not worth it?
Was I not pleasing to your sight?
I bleed the same as you
Only my eyes have not lost their light
I don’t see a world full of darkness
But I do see a void in my life
Where once there was love
But now only lays strife
The truth is I’m leaving
And I won’t miss this place
My hopes and dreams will fade away
But your words will always lurk in that dark place
They will haunt me in my sleep
Until my dieing day
Forever one last memory
Of how my debts I couldn’t pay
I want to let you know I forgive you
For throwing that part of my life away
I just wish you would have loved me
For the man I am today
Copyright ©
JBH
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Re: Daddy
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by emystar on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 03:35:06 AM AEST
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So sad but very well said.
Hang tuff.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Daddy
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by guiltycircles on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 03:43:20 AM AEST
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| this is really good... at least you know you're worthy of love, your talent is awesome!!! |
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Re: Daddy
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by deepviolet on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 03:59:53 AM AEST
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| this is a really good poem, i identify with what you're saying. keep strong and don't give up. |
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Re: Daddy
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by Zandria on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 07:31:34 AM AEST
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Well written, well thought out..
Well, beautiful. |
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Re: Daddy
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by xxbreathlessx on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 10:45:49 AM AEST
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| how sad! but it was an impressive write! keep on writing ! |
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Re: Daddy
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by Kayden on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 01:47:45 PM AEST
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| Gasp... Incredible I loved it and man it was sad but so good. LOL Great Job |
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Re: Daddy
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by ScreenSaver77 on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 04:24:19 PM AEST
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Well written poem. You really get to the reader and that accomplishes the task of a poem.
Best Wishes
H |
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Re: Daddy
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by AshRayne on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 08:47:33 PM AEST
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man, the mistakes a father can make. a single outburst, a single threat, and we beg mercy, apologize for nothing. i admire that you were able to look aside, something i myself could not accomplish...
"Was I not worth it?
Was I not pleasing to your sight?
I bleed the same as you
Only my eyes have not lost their light"
so true, so very true. was that what they really ment, or were they toying with us?
exquisite writing that is your gift, be blessed, for you are perfection.
~Ash |
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Re: Daddy
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 02:18:11 AM AEST
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| awwwwwww im sorry i hope things get better for you ,, i can relate to this cause i also had a daddy who left me when i was 5 yrs old and it hurts really bad and you never get over it . |
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