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Divinity
Contributed by
Iwan
on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 09:02:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
ambiguous
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Eyes from a distance are piercing through my skin
Their thoughts are just products of the world they live in
They will tear until nothing remains
Just a stain
Of another wish
(Chorus)
Fall by design
Rise up through fears
Of another red new year
Scarstruck again, swimming in regret
Forever open and divine
Tell me
Tell me
How transparent must I seem
Everything’s faded
Please stare this way again
I’m a breath away, but a touch too far
Stay wherever the hell you are
I’ll hold my thoughts at bay again
Afraid of what will leave my mouth
If I ever get through
Failing this way is always a choice
Illuminate my faults but hide my face
(Chorus 2)
Rise and refine
From all the tears
Of another scarred new fear
Forget in ten, stroke through, forget
All will be fine
Again
The perfections are lost again
Lying beneath a layer of life
Divinity is dead in a world such as this
Until someone pays the price
Copyright ©
Iwan
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2005-08-04 21:02:19]
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Re: Divinity
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 09:53:11 PM AEST
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A sterling poem! The language is excellent, and the theme very thought-provoking. I am impressed.
I feel the sense of ambiguity, not of the writing, but that innate kind that we so feel the need to wear in our dealings with our fellow man. Discerning eyes you have.
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Re: Divinity
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 12:48:35 AM AEST
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| A very good poem. SLipSiX. |
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Re: Divinity
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by Archie on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 09:02:17 AM AEST
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| I have a poem called "Equality" that more specifically talks about the subject. I warn you though it is a strongly opinioned write. This has comparisons I can relate to 1- the refining from tears is actually biblical 2- when you said everythings faded I see my view of people as different than they really are. I don't know if that was what you were trying to say. That is some of what I saw. This is a very thoughtful write each time I read it I get a new quirk of perspective and reason. |
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Re: Divinity
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by mom11159 on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 10:33:18 PM AEST
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excellent poem/song you have done a fine job with this a delight to read your words so captivating your imagery so wonderful
excellent job
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Re: Divinity
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by Loende on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 09:53:34 PM AEST
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I really loved this piece...
Everything's faded
please look this way again....
Who hasn't had that diologue go through their minds? It's brilliant. I encourage to go with it!
Loende |
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Re: Divinity
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by Lionel on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 01:55:27 PM AEST
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You don't seem transparent, just sad, disappointed. You're mostly right about your "Divinity" statement. Divinity did SEEM absent, til someone DID pay the price. I know who that someone was - and is.
Very thought provoking write though.
God bless |
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