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Ode to Love
Contributed by
mckayla
on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 11:41:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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I can feel love,
a dancing siloette
untame untouched and unfamiliar
i can hear love
voice love
breath love
love keeps me
I can not keep love
It is free firey forgiving
Love is
patient
excepting
powerful
It runs through me
all mighty
in controll
I taste love
soothing
breathtaking
spicy
love cures me, aches me , soothes me
I live for love
haunting
mesmerizing
hipnotic
take controll of me
feed me
sing to me
i fear you
comfort me
I will dance with you
ode to love
Copyright ©
mckayla
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2005-08-03 23:41:37]
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Re: Ode to Love
(User Rating: 1 )
by EricBRamey on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 11:51:54 PM AEST
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| Nice work...at first glance your poem appears trite...but after reading it...it makes sense and it all comes together. How on earth could we live, if we don't dance passionately with love. Very nice work mckayla...Eric |
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Re: Ode to Love
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 01:15:44 AM AEST
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Not bad, not bad. The language is good, and with practice I sense it will get even better.
There are some spelling errors. Maybe find a proofreader? Do keep it up, though.
Andrew |
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